The Everyday Norm

Just a little insight into how I view the world.

 

Sin rains down

Upon the backs

Of the commoners

As they toil in shame

To produce evil for the wicked

 

The Outcasts hideaway in pain

Unable to distinguish

Truth from the lies as

Hope hides her hand

From those who are good

 

Lose, lose

Fail, fail

Die, die

 

Beaten down

Differences blind

Ability untapped

Insight ignored

Care forgotten

 

Talents trapped

By an empty world

That wants not emotion

Or truth or fairness

But instead power

Greed

Want

Want

Want

 

Hailstorms of impatient demands

Destroy the confidence

Break down the human

Make new a machine

Relentless control

 

In this false world

Even true love can lie

Giving is greedy

For it occurs only where

Indirect profit thrives

Give a little

Give a little

TAKE IT ALL

 

Author's Note

critisism greatly accepted, compliments enjoyed, and ideas valued above all else

Reviews

[Que]

What you're saying is true enough, yes, I suppose. Sometimes good is done because it makes the do-gooder feel good (hah hah.) Humans are creatures of self-interest. They fall in love because it's satisfying to say, "This man/woman is mine." They give money to the poor because it makes them look grand and righteous. You understand what I'm saying, so... ect.

But I also believe there are those who do good because it's what should be done. To lend a helping hand. If they feel good then it's because emotions are contagious and they had made someone feel happy.

A lovely poem, thanks for the sharing of your thoughts.

~Que

[liers]

definatly harsh on the world but hey the world sux... love it :)

[Delilah]

In this false world
Even true love can lie
Giving is greedy
For it occurs only where
Indirect profit thrives
Give a little
Give a little
TAKE IT ALL

--> i love this part. ^^ yes yes.. even true love CAN lie.. ^^

[Str8jacket]

This is a very intelligent critisim of the world. Everything you've said here is true, and that can be viewed as sad. But one must always keep the hope that good, and most importantly good people, exsist in the world. Where good exsists there lives giving. The more people give the more we can learn what is really valuable in life.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Quite like the story of my life and that of many others that I have had the privilege if getting acquainted with. And the truth is there are so many ways of giving... however minutely... and if we all gave just a little, and that each day... it won't be Utopia but pretty darn close. Thanks for sharing. And waiting, rather impatiently for your other poems to be posted and/or written. Cheers.

[Christopher Michael Smi..]

"Hailstorms of impatient demands" - I like that line, and the piece is awesome as well.

The ending capitalized puts the extra umph needed, fully exposing your emotional breath.

Now what else you got?