Loss Clock

Loss Clock

A Poem by DaniElle LaPointe
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exlporing grief through free form

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>the sun refuses to rise and fall according to my pain
and now I’ve stowed away on
three trips around that glowing orb
I scribble grief words  
As they surface without use of voluntary muscles
pulled from me by this force
rolling around me
thick and solid
not a wind
but a specific gravity
bringing me to my
broken knees
chapped and scarred
 
I am at a loss
I am at loss
you went through a windshield little brother
so now I go through
one with you everyday
 
glass shards and all…
 
piercing my memories
moments when the sun lit
your eyes
and painted you tan
that damn burning star
distant
pulling
 
I’ll set my clock
to something
else

© 2023 DaniElle LaPointe


Author's Note

DaniElle LaPointe
Free form ignore grammar etc...

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sorry to hear about the loss.... i actualyl read this poem twice. I waned to make sure absorbed everything, and i'm glad i did... it was the lines I am at a loss, and the revealing of your brother.. that made me think, maybe i should go back and read the begginning now that i know that. I like how it captivated me, then made me want to understand more. very emotional piece your heart is exposed. thank you for sharing

much love n respect

-Lalli



Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A speechless justies to poetry i most say

Posted 11 Years Ago


Beautiful and tragic...made my heart frown but a really really great poem, felt it for sure!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I am sorry to hear for your loss I know the feeling but it was so beautiful as well.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Written in 2008. Last adjustment for sharing content caused this to copyright 2013.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is a very beautiful piece:) Great work:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The traumatic circumstances surrounding this specific event in your life, has understandably, been reflected in the poetic structure you choose to describe your intense, deep, and profound sorrow.

It has been written, grief has five discrete stages; denial, anger, bargaining, depression and acceptance: all of which manifest themselves at differing times after the event.

The most important thing is sharing your feelings with others who are supportive and understanding.

You have my prayers!

Phill(ozofee)

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a very painful and very moving poem. I think you wrote it
well and the pain of the memory comes across strongly. Sad.

Tina

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh my, I can only imagine what you're going through dear poet.
It's nice that you have this creative outlet to help in some small way deal with what you're going through.
And in doing so, through the love of your brother, you help others deal with their own struggles.

So courageous, and meaningful that you can share your feelings with us.

Dear blessings to you and yours.
Rich

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You've expressed your sorrow in a beautiful poetic way. Free form or not, poetry is poetry and this is heartfelt and beautiful. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Firstly, this is a beautifully written and shaped poem.

Secondly, it expresses a tragedy and a grief that can't fail to touch anyone reading your poem. I can't write any more. Hugging you.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 21, 2008
Last Updated on September 18, 2023

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DaniElle LaPointe
DaniElle LaPointe

Calgary, Canada



About
I have returned to my first love, poetry, since the death of my only sibling Aaron. I write poetry, fiction, and non-fiction. I like to explore grief, loss, and the healing process. I write as things .. more..

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