Love At The Brink

Love At The Brink

A Poem by AJNJ

Dare a love at the brink

Retrace its path, blindfold?

As a plucky rose blossoms

Defying mud and mould

Deeply scented and strong

Its royal bloom ten-fold 

As a ship sans its admiral

Plundered of all its gold 

Still battles its way to shore

Through a molten, cauldron sea

Of fiery tempests untold  

Dare a love at the brink

Retrace its path, blindfold?

Back to a culprit heart

Some happy ghosts to slay   

Some illusions to uphold

© 2020 AJNJ


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AJNJ
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I looked in, Pestonjee, and your piece lives up to my name! It reads like another selectively worded poem; a piece constructed from a list of words given; and they read wonderfully well. There are some difficult words chosen yet you have placed them extremely well in your narrative. Love at the brink, huh? Well....for me there is no looking back. Only forwards. Any ghosts of the past have already been slayed. Though, for most poets here, delving in the past is becoming more important than living in the present. The places people go for inspiration, i guess. This was a well constructed piece. Experiment successful in my humble opinion! Well Done!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Months Ago

Thanks a ton Brilliance! And maybe I should mention 'Experimental' in my author's note as some poets.. read more



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I probably didn't review this before becuz I saw the bolded words & recognized this as a 10-word challenge, which I hate. Your writing is so strong & original & well-expressed, you do not need a flimsy device to help you say something worth reading. But some people insist on using this helpful crutch, so I just say, why advertise it? I don't make my readers sit thru whatever bullshit I need to get my mojo going. I just get to the crux of what I'm sharing & that's what you should do becuz those 10 words mean absolutely NOTHING to the reader. Sorry for my 10-word rant. Just a pet peeve, nothing against you. I realize lots of writers find it helpful to have words they're trying to use & I do something in a similar vein when I rhyme obsessively (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

3 Months Ago

Thanks a ton, Ms. Barley! My reason for trying these challenges is only to test my capacity to get s.. read more
I love how you put some of those words in bold print and it was very phenomenal.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

3 Months Ago

Thank you very much Hazel Clark :)
Lacey Sue

3 Months Ago

Anytime I hope to read more like it
Wow Jee, you seem to be stealing my thought of the day! This love and its split souls shall be cut off and left on their way. Like chopping off the split ends to let rest of the hair survive. It can be a coincidence that your poem matches with every bit of a situation which I've witnessed for a long time, gladly it has ended.
One's hands get dirty while hitting mud on another. Instead of continuing that I believe in conclusions. Thanks many thanks for writing this. And to Jamila too, wonder what has driven her to leave this site.



Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

3 Months Ago

Hey Tahsin! Love your review. You always come up with unique insight on any stuff I write and I real.. read more
AJNJ

3 Months Ago

Btw...write something new for me. I'm bored...Mail me the link when you're done posting.
Tahsin.Z🍁

3 Months Ago

I don't know how to react on this! I've seen many brilliant writers closing their accounts just afte.. read more
I like this, it feels like love has persevered through the hardship faced.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Months Ago

Thanks you very much Ms. Ana 🤗 Great to see you!
Ana Papaya

4 Months Ago

Welcome. :)
This one has excellent rhyming and a lot of vivid imagery. Not totally sure what the brink represents. Is it that reluctance that presents at the last minute to keep us from committing? Or is it an intuition that keeps us from becoming involved with the wrong person? I think the poem works, either way.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Months Ago

Thanks a ton dear sir. It's great to come back to such appreciation from you.
By the brink .. read more

I reckon you deserve a medal mate and ya friend needs locking up ... on a more serious note, I think you are so much braver than me, my nib would surely turn to jelly under such testing circumstances as you outline..

A poem to be proud of PJ and truly :)


Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Months Ago

A true taskmaster she is!
Thanks a ton and more dear sir! Your encouragement means very much.. read more
Neville

4 Months Ago


welcome & true :)
I like the fact that you have created this poem out of a jumble of words sent to you by a friend. You were truly inspired. Some things survive against all the odds. That always interests me. When the chips are down and it can go either way, and yet the positive pathway is found and taken.

A meaningful and skilled write.


Chris

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Months Ago

Thanks a ton, my friend! I'll treasure your feedback here always! Wishing you a beautiful day & week.. read more
A more than well-met challenge.
Not easy to put another's random words together in such a way that they communicate
something unique. Words must be carefully woven and resulting coordinated thoughts
cannot express the merely trite.
Kudos, P, you've created an amazing poem!


Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Months Ago

I'll treasure this review sir! Thanks a ton and more! 🤗
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I looked in, Pestonjee, and your piece lives up to my name! It reads like another selectively worded poem; a piece constructed from a list of words given; and they read wonderfully well. There are some difficult words chosen yet you have placed them extremely well in your narrative. Love at the brink, huh? Well....for me there is no looking back. Only forwards. Any ghosts of the past have already been slayed. Though, for most poets here, delving in the past is becoming more important than living in the present. The places people go for inspiration, i guess. This was a well constructed piece. Experiment successful in my humble opinion! Well Done!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Months Ago

Thanks a ton Brilliance! And maybe I should mention 'Experimental' in my author's note as some poets.. read more
Wow! Who gave you these ten words sir? I'd love to know. A very interesting poem you weaved out of them. To me it felt like revisiting an old love and that is something that usually doesn't agree with me. We should never retrace lost paths. But it's just my view, meow meow!

Posted 4 Months Ago


AJNJ

4 Months Ago

Thanks Ms. Kat. Home quarantine and lockdowns mean we have no choice but to phone and follow old gir.. read more
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

3 Months Ago

You're most welcome my friend

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