What Makes You Dance?

What Makes You Dance?

A Poem by AJNJ


What is it that makes your eyes
Candescent in the dark
What is it that screams in you
To die but leave your mark

What is it that makes you burn
Yet doesn't let you die
What is it that lends you wings
So you can kiss the sky

What is it that keeps you buoyed
When oceans suck you in
What is it that let's you breathe
When you feel dead within

What is it that let's you flow
As driftwood in a stream
What is it that let's you glow
As *Sothis in your dreams

What is it that lingers on
When life in you is stilled
What is it that labours on
When nothing's left to build

What is it the cosmos strums
As music just for you
What is it that reflects you
In brilliant astral hues

What is it that cleanses you
As rain unclogs your soul
What is it that restores you
And makes your rapture whole 

© 2020 AJNJ


Author's Note

AJNJ
What's your passion?


*Sothis ~ Synonym for Sirius, the brightest star at night
Syllables are 7-6-7-6 in all verses.

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I love this poem! I love the way you incorporated dancing and other questions. I love to write, poetry too, but I really love to write my stories too. I'm always incorporating rain and sunrises just because I love both of them so much! And I very much loved this poem too!

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AJNJ

1 Week Ago

Dear Colacat, thanks a ton for your great, encouraging review. I can see you love writing just as I.. read more
Colacat

1 Week Ago

Thank you so so much, I love writing poetry but writing stories is my real passion (:



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Excellent A.J I have nothing but admiration for you my friend .. every now and then, I think to myself .. maybe I should try to discipline my own writing and decide on a strict form .. but then I quickly decide otherwise ... I dunno about dance mate but you certainly had my foot tapping .. that's a big YES from me :)


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AJNJ

3 Days Ago

Your poetry is a pleasure and a true joy to read and very very complete in its expression, dear sir... read more
One exceptionally lovely piece of work, AJ--ode to the mystery and mastery of the human spirit.
A most edifying read, gifted poet!

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AJNJ

3 Days Ago

Thanks a ton for such elating and uplifting words today, dear sir!
Interesting poetic device here in which each verse consists of two questions about motivation. Each person's answers will be different, for we are all individuals. The poem could serve an exploration exercise for those who are frustrated and perplexed, for most of us haven't considered all of our possibilities. It's a much better alternative than getting strung out on drugs.

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AJNJ

5 Days Ago

If only more people could discover the natural highs within, there would be little need for drugs fo.. read more
This is just... so beautiful! Seriously! The words and your style just flow together so passionately! I can't wait to check out more of your writing! Much love to you and have an amazing day! ❤️

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AJNJ

1 Week Ago

Thanks a TON Rose! Loved your very imaginative story too! Much love right back to you! 🤗
A beautiful poem. I love reading mystery novels and eating cassava chips.

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AJNJ

1 Week Ago

Thanks a ton Ms. Razia for the kind and gracious comment!
My passions are gaming painting, writing.I also just love pizza but I suppose it cannot be put as the kind of passion you mean here.whenever I do something creative in my hobbies I feel I can dance.I liked this poem a lot.

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AJNJ

1 Week Ago

Thank a ton dear Mr.G! Enjoy your passions ! 🤗
Well penned verse AJ. Written with your usual flair. Class style which I enjoy very much. What is it that drives my passion? Several things, not just one. Poetry of course is one of them, but love of nature is another and also my garden. Then there is family. My love of family keeps me going when the chips are really down. You never disappoint AJ. Always good to pay you a visit.

Chris

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Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

I should thank you a ton too AJ for this endearing response. I do indeed weave nature into my poetry.. read more
AJNJ

1 Week Ago

You have a great weekend too Ms. Chris! 🤗 Cheers!
Christine Anne Shaw

1 Week Ago

Thank you :)
As foxfire in your dreams, perhaps? A form of bioluminiscence....

To be honest the question you pose cannot be answered so easily for me since I am a creature of many habits and passions. If i had to single out one thing I couldnt do without.....that would be knowledge. Without knowledge our ability to achieve anything is incapacitated. This is a surprising poem written in strict formula; with the adjustment to your selected 4th verse line the poem is flawless and the examples used are well selected and original. Its a poem that will allow all your readers to open up a little portion of themselves, and for a community of writers and poets, that is a good thing. Very well done on this one, AJNJ! 💛

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

1 Week Ago

Beauty and intellect are a heady mix and you have them in awesome proportions Ms. Marina. So I am n.. read more
For me? Writing...three wives later, the only one who stays, the one I can depend on...they muse.

when all else fails, she cuddles with me and makes me feel better.

4th line
"a candle in your dreams"?
just a thought.

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AJNJ

1 Week Ago

Indeed dear sir, you're known by your words and they're a beacon for countless who are inspired by t.. read more
I love this poem! I love the way you incorporated dancing and other questions. I love to write, poetry too, but I really love to write my stories too. I'm always incorporating rain and sunrises just because I love both of them so much! And I very much loved this poem too!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

1 Week Ago

Dear Colacat, thanks a ton for your great, encouraging review. I can see you love writing just as I.. read more
Colacat

1 Week Ago

Thank you so so much, I love writing poetry but writing stories is my real passion (:

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