After the Big Bang

After the Big Bang

A Poem by AJNJ

Alien earths collide
The dust and debris settle
Post the rumble and roar

Oceans explode, implode
Tsunamis swell and subside
On calm, placid shores

Barbed beasts mellow
Roused less with time
Till they grapple no more

Volcanoes too gurgle
Their fire all spent
Sapid lava, coming to fore

Riveting rains recede
Rainbows roost in a sky
Charged and electric no more

Strange seasons sync up
Gleaming meadows gold
Telling bliss to softly soar

But the heart now seeks
Other thrills, other new earths
Lost,  all its ardor

© 2022 AJNJ


Author's Note

AJNJ
I'd love some critique on this piece, to make it read better.

Thanks a ton! 😊

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Nice to finally read you again, AJ! You spared some of your valuable partying time to give us a unique metaphor ladened perspective on the creation and journey of human relations between two loved up 'Alien Earths'. The Alien terminology is very appropriate for the coming together of two very different people. Much like the way our universe and world evolved from the Big Bang, so too does any relationship. It ebbs and flows as it evolves and powers through all manner of trials and tribulations. Time passes, love blossoms like a Spring, then love may fade in it's Autumn. Ultimately, time becomes an enemy. A fully evolved relationship can lose its intial spark as the heart begins to wander in search of another 'earth' to collide with. You have attempted a most complex metaphor and completed it bravely. A few reads and your idea becomes clear. Certainly not a poem for those without their first morning coffee! A remarkable piece, all the same. Great to read you again, my friend. I expect tons and tons and tons of thanks for this review!! ⚘

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AJNJ

1 Day Ago

Mademoiselle,
What a great review. You know you always make my spaces brighter :) Thanks a .. read more



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Dear AJ, longtime no see. It has been good to see DIVYA, Jamila and now you back here. Hope is all well. I am useless at critique. Some excel at it. This certainly was a big bang and I loved the imagery and energy in this piece which could be taken as a metaphor for a relationship on a dynamite collision course. After the storm comes much needed calm. Much enjoyed and best wishes.

Chris

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AJNJ

11 Hours Ago

Ms.Chris! It's been so long. Life distracts me from poetry now that the world here is opening up. Ju.. read more
A vivid description of the prologue. Wait until men arrive; then you really will see some fireworks.

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AJNJ

1 Day Ago

Yes, I shudder to think of that. Thanks a ton sir.
I think your alliteration really propels this write.
I love the idea of the volcanoes gurgling....
and riveting rains recede, a solid paradox there.
I wonder if we are an alien planet to others...there has to be life somewhere else.

for us to think we are the only planet in the entire solar system is a bit of an ego trip.
and the way we are acting now....maybe moving to another planet could rekindle the spirit.
j.

Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

1 Day Ago

Man should just make the best of one earth. Thanks a ton sir.
Nice to finally read you again, AJ! You spared some of your valuable partying time to give us a unique metaphor ladened perspective on the creation and journey of human relations between two loved up 'Alien Earths'. The Alien terminology is very appropriate for the coming together of two very different people. Much like the way our universe and world evolved from the Big Bang, so too does any relationship. It ebbs and flows as it evolves and powers through all manner of trials and tribulations. Time passes, love blossoms like a Spring, then love may fade in it's Autumn. Ultimately, time becomes an enemy. A fully evolved relationship can lose its intial spark as the heart begins to wander in search of another 'earth' to collide with. You have attempted a most complex metaphor and completed it bravely. A few reads and your idea becomes clear. Certainly not a poem for those without their first morning coffee! A remarkable piece, all the same. Great to read you again, my friend. I expect tons and tons and tons of thanks for this review!! ⚘

Posted 2 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

1 Day Ago

Mademoiselle,
What a great review. You know you always make my spaces brighter :) Thanks a .. read more
So many earths floating around and colliding lol. Nice one from you.

Posted 2 Days Ago


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AJNJ

1 Day Ago

Thanks a ton Ms. Mo. I like collisions a lot. 😎
Tania Mo

7 Hours Ago

Tee hee 😏
You certainly surprised me after posting after so long. Now we see you back in action. How quickly you get bored with new earths LOL. Sincerely lovely AJ 👋😽

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AJNJ

1 Day Ago

Thanks a ton and an ocean my itzy bitzy Kat 😎💕
masterful poem! sincerely, Amber.

Posted 3 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

1 Day Ago

Thanks a ton Ms Amber. Soon to read you too 🙏⚘

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