Just a Few Drops of Rain

Some have blamed it on those eccentricities,

On the recurrences of a whim,

But failed to look deep inside

Where the crevices have long waited,

Waited to be filled.

And what would they not do,

Do for a few drops of rain,

A few drops of rain on the land barren,

For it has long been haunted by the chastity,

And the arid, pious hollowness calls for

To be tainted at this hour.

 

And thy vision’s tunnels have been infested

By the cravers of corporeality,

And thy mind have played the soul catcher

Amidst the phlegmatic plebeian

For the much denied amorous wants,

And thy have waded in alien waters

Garnering quietude for that inner disquiet,

And thy words of worship defy those celestial confines

All for a few drops of rain,

Just a few drops of rain…

On the land so barren.

 

They have ogled through those narrow slits

Woven stories out of nothingness

For they are the connoisseur of hush-hush blather.

But what are you going to do?

Draw lines around you?

Social banishment: Is that what you fear?

I hope not, for let thou be lest assured

I would give anything for thy place

To have that choice, and be able to choose

 No matter if it vitiates the morals,

Or desecrates the rules,

For I would blissfully get spoiled

For a few drops of rain,

Yes, just a few drops of rain,

On the land so barren.

Author's Note

This was written for one of my aunts. She often befriends people from all walks of life (literally)... people often criticize her for her whimsical, moody self... but it had made me think... she is kind of lonely... and may be the want of warmth and affection has prompted her to do this.... stories of our lives can be way too different... but do we take time enough to understand before we analyze someone's behavior ? I don't think so...

Reviews

[Hayley]

Very moving repetitiveness: "For I would blissfully get spoiled
For a few drops of rain,
Yes, just a few drops of rain,
On the land so barren."
Your vocabulary is extremely exceptional and effective, as well as your use of literary devices. I was especially struck by your use of alliteration.
I really enjoyed this read. You have great potential for growth as a writer; Keep writing! I look forward to more.

[Daniel88Batson]

A good piece but not a poem. Here we have a dramatic monologue. If you want to make this a poem bring forward your imagery because you have some good stuff.
It's lines like... 'To have that choice, and be able to choose
No matter if it vitiates the morals,
Or desecrates the rules' that turn it into a monologue. If your poem is good enough it will tell us this without saying it.

[Poetic Beauty]

This makes me think of a love affair. What someone would do for a few moments of time with the one their heart sings for but maybe that is because I am one of those who believes in love and the power it holds. I love this piece it is filled with deep thought and beauty.

[Moriarty]

Amazing depth...the use of metaphors is subtle...but draws you in...really nice piece :) the context in the author's note really helps to perceive the depth of the writing....

[Emily Rae]

your use of metaphor in this piece is striking. the barren land and drops of rain--there should be more rain as far as I'm concerned; the land wouldn't be so barren

[patricia]

You are a very talented writer, your lines have a very special quality, this is a deep and excellent poem. Your author's note has such depth too. Thankyou.

[EMMIE]

This is so true and you tell the story in such a beautiful way. Im sure we all have someone in our family or friends circle just like your aunt. Awesome poem!

[MAC]

excellent write....for so many reasons. this piece connects on a personal level.

[Demi Rose]

many things come to mind when i read this. marvelously penned!