Freedom In Me

Coming from a conservative Indian background with little freedom for women and then living in the UK which is the complete opposite, this poem highlights the internal conflict of freedom that I face.

There I was in my short blue dress,
As I swayed my hips from left to right,
I felt my skirt ride up
With every jerk I took
I revealed my confident thighs and my free body

A body that isn't meant for anyone
A body that is meant for me
A body that is beautiful and confident
A body that isn't afraid

I did not feel guilty, I did not feel shame
For I have done no sin
For I have hurt no one
I was proud, proud of myself
For dancing in a short dress
For letting myself flow through the beats of the music

For feeling attractive
For feeling good
For feeling alive

I was not afraid of the endless judgements
I was not afraid of the infinite shame
So I danced and I danced all night
And with every step I took
I felt my body smiling
Smiling at my inner self in joy

I felt sexy, I felt alive
I found the freedom, the freedom in me

Author's Note

This is the second poem that I have ever written so please do not be harsh on me:)

Reviews

[Autumn Lyric]

Beautiful job for the second poem and sharing this contrast in your life that you needed to tell so that others can get the sense of it. Well done. The more you write the better your craft will be.

[RubyOmma]

I love it. The ideas you present here are really wonderful self love. I like the happy tone to this poem, and the rhythm.

[Al R. Arce]

For your second poem you did well! As I started reading I thought the poem was about a nun having sex and not feeling bad about it! Now that would have been something! You don't have to be celibate to be a person of God! But then I realized it was about virginity lost. Not exactly what I am looking for in this contest! However I do thank you for submitting. Keep writing! It is good therapy and better than playing PS3!

[Blogger]

Whew! Very nice! I am so glad to witness your 'coming out' as it were. Good for you! I am glad you had fun and are happy with yourself. That is awesome.

[Aastha Tyagi]

Thank you so much!

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

This is really nice, but I get the feeling, that your still holding back in penning your emotions in your writing... Good luck with your next poems... Waiting patiently....

I love poems that critique norms and society's moral police

[Aastha Tyagi]

I feel that way too. Thanks!

[Roger Turgeon]

What a great peace. There should be no shame in being yourself. The more Indian writers I read the more I understand about Indian women. Thanks. ( : O )

[Aastha Tyagi]

My pleasure!

[raj24]

its about the joy that we get when we know we really dont care, a child dances without knowing the best of moves, a free soul just live with its dreams and confident that her heart is pure...this one is simple and beautiful..ur feeling great about urself, the way u look, the way u r feeling, society has its own opinions..but yaar who cares they will always say something ...so congrats for living ur life ur way..enjoy the freedom n keep on writing..:)

[Aastha Tyagi]

Thank you, Raj! Yes, I shall.

[raj24]

you are welcome :)

[Gregory Stires]

This poem is very good. I like how it showed that you don't care what people think and that you are free for our body is meant for us and no one else.also that while dancing you felt free from all the heavy chains of expectations,judgement,and opinions of others.

[Aastha Tyagi]

Thank you, Gregory!