Beautiful Eyes

Two beautiful eyes follow

Me, without me knowing

Those of my beloved one’s

Who need to make me his

Two beautiful eyes follow

Me, in all my problems

Those of my Dad’s

Who have care for me

Two beautiful eyes follow

Me, when I am alone

Those of my Mom’s

Who need to make me happy

Two beautiful eyes follow

Me, when I am happy

Those of my friends’

Who need to enjoy with me

Two beautiful eyes of mine

Never saw what’s happening around,

Ever cared tears in those

Beautiful  eyes till

The days of life counted on

Reviews

[Surya]

Thoughtful and beautiful....conveyed a lot in last stanza...

[Abraham George]

Thanks , i just felt it and i wrote

[theHobbit]

This is a very thoughtful poem and I really like it! I can't wait to read some more of your writing!!

[Abraham George]

i will inform you when i add new stuff

[theHobbit]

Thank you! :)

[Isabella Ivy]

Hello friend, and thank you for the read request :) I'm sorry that I've been away. I feel the message of this poem. It is tidy and concise and gets the heartfelt meaning across. Please check your tenses. If you desire it to be English accurate the plural 'eyes' need to be followed by 'follow' with no 's'. Also, no 's on 'ones' 'dads' 'mom's'. You'll need to have someone check who is more knowledgeable than me or Google :) I think 'need' in the first stanza should be 'needs' as well. I'm sorry this language is so complicated. Don't be discouraged. We're all learning! I.I.

[Abraham George]

thanks you for being a good critic. i will check those line and will sure make the changes and i really need someone like you to help me with my english.

i like it

[Isabella Ivy]

I'm sure you'll do well! You are a dedicated poet and hard worker :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Very heart touching. I liked it.

[Abraham George]

its good to know that you liked and may be somewhere you can connect it to someone

[Najam Us Saher]

Probably...... ☺

[E.V. Black]

Very interesting, thoughtful, and lovely.

[Abraham George]

thanks for understand my small writings

[E.V. Black]

my pleasure

[Manasa.L]

A very meaningful poem. Excellent work. The message here has to reach millions of hearts so they understand the meaning and power of those eyes.
The love in those eyes.
Amazing writing my friend!!!:)

[Abraham George]

thanks and i didn't think this one is that good. i just got the idea now and i write it here directly

[Manasa.L]

ideas come randomly but its us who give the meaning, very well done George

[Abraham George]

thanks and i appreciate your review

[Writing Angel]

I loved it such a sweet message the only criticism I can say is just the line "who need to care me"... maybe "care for me"? just a thought its beautiful and I really loved it

[Abraham George]

thanks for pointing out the mistakes

[Abraham George]

is the editing is okay?

[Writing Angel]

yes perfect except "cared" not care haha.... but yes its great

[Giulia King]

Beautiful poem, Abraham! I love the picture as well. Well done :)

[Abraham George]

thanks, and i am happy that you like it