CRESCENT MOON

A space in time just before sleeping.

 

Were you aware?

While you slept?

 

My finger lightly traced your jaw line,

and along that soft edge of you

I felt both your firm resolve

and gentle compassion.

 

Were you aware?

While you slept?

 

That I nuzzled your ear and

whispered the most quiet of whispers

ever whispered, thanking you for rose petals

on the floor, tea mugs for two, bottomless steak-fries,

dog mountain, nautical nellies, half dome, murphys, and hanging in the air, for sticks turned blue,

and for swans and hamburgers in paradise, too.

 

Were you aware?

While you slept?

 

The slight, excited tremble of my body as

I slipped my hand into yours, falling

asleep against the crescent moon of you.

 

While you slept,

were you aware?

Reviews

[emmajoy]

How to comment about such sensitive words, such loving words! You've used them to describe an emotion that's virtually undescribable by most people: the closeness, the emotion of loving someone day by day by day.

Yes, that's what I mean.. there's longevity in this piece, either what's been or what's to come, such is the warmth and depth of your relationship.

'Falling asleep against the crescent moon of you' - a perfect line. Beautiful.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Very lovely, romantic poem. Thank you for sharing such beautiful writing. Debileah

[Leah]

i'm sure she was aware

[LadyLove]

This is exactly what I look forward to with the love of my life. I will share this one with him for you have expressed what I know I feel so deeply when I am with him, and how I know I would feel when I am with him this very way. Beautiful!

[Leah Simone]

Cheeseburgers in paradise - the Jimmy Buffet of summer-filled splashes of glee - you captured those simple loving things -like the mugs for two and bottomless fries - the bountiful basket of sacred moments - the fruit of true love - I can see you winding together like vines - braiding forever. This was beautiful - I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Rambling Prose]

What a beautifully written expression of a love so deep & oh so sweet; this painted a smile across my face.

A lovely write...

[Jessi]

Oh this is so beautiful. I fell in love with this it wonderful

[Trisha]

Very romantic. so romantic it makes me HUNGRY!! Lol. I like your unique style my friend. Full of life and wisdom you are.

[Gandré]

Beautifuly romantic... warm-hearted and making happy just by reading it. Iteresting this repetition. This is like someone is wishing himself that she would know his feeling for her. -so wonderful!

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i like the quite thoughtful repetition of the questions that drove home your sensitivity and care.