The Courage of an Ant

Title says it all. :) A [hopefully inspirational] poem about a brave ant. ;)

A daring ant crawls on a floating leaf

and sails along the sidewalks, holding on,

avoiding sewers leading underground,

evading feet and paper coffee cups

that fall from hands that litter endlessly.

Abandoned cans, once filled with sticky drinks,

and crumpled, dirt-stained papers splash around

to anger waves that toss and turn Ant’s boat

around and upside down and to and fro

‘til ruthless sidewalk dust invades Ant’s mouth.

The drenched leaf blankets him. He sleeps and wakes

to find his leaf still there, keeping him warm.

The water flees away and leaves the ant,

with Leaf, his only friend. The ant slips out

and struggles to his feet. He climbs aboard

his leaf, prepares to sail and soon, a breath

of wind lifts him. On waves of air they soar

towards clouds and flocks of geese that stop to stare.

The voyage on the streets is done, and Ant

begins anew through skies of gold and blue.

Author's Note

Any kind of critique will do, thank you! ^^

Reviews

[Ramya]

I love the title, I totally adore this poem. I can draw a visual sketch quite easily!!

A teeny-weeny suggestion, if I may - The poem can be made more wonderful if some of the lines are written in a poetic flow.
E.g. - "The drenched leaf blankets him. He sleeps and wakes
to find his leaf still there, keeping him warm."

These lines are prosaic, as in say from a story (Maybe my perspective!!). A change in the placement of words or replacement with better words would lend more beauty to these lines.

However I absolutely enjoyed the last two lines....once again visual appeal!!

Great job:)