Wild Card Love

It's about a broken relationship.

Wild Card Love

 

Trying to forget your face,

all my rainbows turn to gray,

everyplace is just a place,

everyday is just a day.

 

"Make believe that I'm still blessed.

Be the object of my quest."

 

Wishing that I may erase

sweet lies that you used to say

won't revive your former grace.

Truth is such a burning ray.

 

"Try to put my lies to rest

lest you have an empty nest."

 

Pondering our last embrace

underneath your charming sway

as you made my pale heart race

makes me beg that you may stay.

 

"You'll forget that I'm a pest

as my paws explore your breast."

 

Survival in any case

drives me to send you away.

You're a Joker, not an Ace.

Find another love to play.

 

"When I'm wild, I'm at my best.

Tallyho! I chase for jest."

Reviews

[Tom]

I like the way the subject of the poem despite the heartache and emotion involved, decides 'good riddance' and moves on !

Quality poem again !

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Tom! Tallyho!

[Perkele.7885]

One of my favorite themes to write about, the broken relationship! And you accomplished this theme so well. So very well. Bravo!

[Aethereal]

Thanks, perkele!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Your style always enthralls me...you know how I am about rhyme, and yet you get me every time with yours. I know it's because you do it well, but beyond that, I find things to be more lyrical than "rhyme-y" when I read your work. As for the concept...this one is probably one of my favorites from you. I see some great metaphorical fodder for contemplation, and I plan to read this one again after I've thought about it for a while.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Sarah! I try to make my poems sing to the strings of an ancient Thracian lyre. The concept of this poem is an ancient one. Relationships lead to twisted emotional dilemmas. There are many metaphors that express twisted emotional dilemmas.

[Rahul]

Wow, that's great that i'm the one here who give you first review of your new write :)
and i liked all stanzas but the one stanza's this below one who touched me indeed...

"You'll forget that I'm a pest
as my paws explore your breast."... lol

Don't you think you were thinking about me when you were making this piece... lol HAHAHAH
powerful write, words're strongly penned with your scented hands and thoughts came in your mind when you were thinking of me...lol (kidding)... thoughts came when you were lost in the world of reality and thinking to live your life freely from your alll life's stress.

This write makes me cool indeed, made me smiley a bit tooo :) your this new write's really very awesome... now it's time to give you this 100/100 :) you got it :)

[Aethereal]

Thanks, Rahul! Be careful with those paws, Rahul. "Paws" is a universal international language.

[Rahul]

My pleasure, Aetheral! Lol, Ok.. i thought that you represented here about Cat Paws...LOL