Sanity's Mask Broke-By:Akeen V.

Such a strange feeling has overcome me today.

My heart pumps and beats in such a different way.

The clouds and the sun are in their same place.

If this feeling not for the day;

Then why a new look upon my face?

I awoke this morning in my normal way.

I took my walk through the normal place.

After my walk I headed home to stay.

I walked in upon a strangers face. 

Anger arose inside me in such an odd way. 

My heart pumped as if I had ran in a race. 

I went to where the stranger lay.

Then grabbed a pillow and covered his face.

He laid still in a peaceful way,

While the air from his lungs left this place.

The feeling of murder has overcome me today.

Reviews

[r]

This is really strangely written. It seems to be lacking emotion, but I still like it. It's dark...and amazing. Simple, again, and kind of odd. I don't know...it just seems to be missing something, or maybe I'm just too tired to realize the poem is perfectly fine and I should just go to bed or something. Whatever it is, I still like this poem.

[H-Jonesy]

wow
An odd thing you have written here (but in a good way, dont fret.)
You lead us in, not thinking about murder in the least, only to end with the death of another.
How ever, it seems to lack the emotion you think one would have after taking a life, but this could have been your intention.
at the same time many questions arise: Why kill? Whats the motive? Who is the one the killer is killing?
All in all, another wonderful write. I find my self enjoying your work more, and more.-
Harmony

[Bridget Mcmaken]

Very well writen. It's a wonderful dark poem.

[Cherrie Palmer]

this has a very light feel that leads to a dark end, good job

[Dream Weaver]

Surreal and alarming, yet we all at one time or another
had these similar thoughts. Well done from a angry
perspective...

[Crinkle°]

wow... gently intense and very well written. The end is not expected, and like I like them.

[Molly]

I like this one a lot. Reminds me of an Edgar Allen Poe poem. At first I thought this was going to be a really simple poem, but then the end surprised me and left me wanting it to go on longer. Is there any reason for the way you divided the stanzas?

[Liza]

interesting
brave
written with wonder
there lies many hidden things between these lines
confusion, loss for words and outlets of anger
fell upon an innocent and weak victim...

[loowzerX]

I think I like this most as it is somewhat relatable. nice write