Out of the Night

 

You’re right, of course

about everything...

and my heart

goes boom in the night.

There’s a slip in the ship

and never the twain shall meet..

Perplexed mind

underscoring

the uncertainty.

Sleepless nights and

restless days and weeks

and months and years,

and yes, even decades...

Festering fear and

harboring discord and

unfortunately,

hatred of times gone by..

Forgetting the good,

the positive,

and yes, even the growth,

that we both knew

and loved and shared

a long time ago...

Quietly, without celebration,

the past disappears

into the future of hope.

 

 

Author's Note

September 2, 2009
I love this poem...I don't know, does that seem too arrogant, pretentious, pompous?
I don't think so...what do you think?
Photo: Key West, Fla (January 2011)
allen

Reviews

[?]

Wonderful
Full of emotion, not arrogant at all. Just true emotion and honesty.
Loved this one myself. We have all been here at least once in our life.
Another great poem Allen

[Tasha]

I loved it too Allen. You are an amazing writer.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Ksmuckler]

I love this...especially the first four lines..."you're right, of couse, about everything..." No, it's not arrogant to love your own poetry. It's necessary.

[Cherrie Palmer]

it is not arrogant// but just like our own children our writing lives, we are flooded with emotion by certain things we create. This is not arrogant just pure honesty// i loved it too

[Sunni Davis]

No, I don't think its too pompus to love your own poem. I love each of my pieces; thats what makes a good writer. You have to feel a connection to your own work. And its understandable that you would love this brilliant piece of poetry. Great job, Allen!

[Mark]

No, nellA, it is most assuredly NOT vain to admit to yourself that you have expressed a set of complicated and deeply personal emotions in a manner that you find appealing. I just wrote someone yesterday that the only RIGHT style of poetry is that which makes you lean back, go "Whew!, and grin. You have done that here, and thus, it is RIGHT!
Am I right, that this is a reflection, with sadness, over the loss of a relationship which went on for a long time, but when the facades were finally let down, you both discovered that what you thought you had had was an illusion, based on false premises?

For my take on a tragic relationship, you might want to peruse
"That Frigid Black Sea".

[Lily Mae]

No, I think it speaks to many. A good strong write about feelings most of us have had a time or two.. :) x

[Brad]

hells no, not pretentious or arrogant or anything! this was simply excellent wordsmithing, you brought the emotions out of the reader and gave them a bit of hope towards the end.