My Demons

My Demons

A Poem by Allison
"

The mind of a schizo.

"
Oh please!
Please let me be!

I want one night, one day,
I need to be free.

I'm suffocating, drowning,
oh god, I can't breathe!

Someone help me!
Someone beleive!

They're there, here...
everywhere,
making me bleed.

Razors slash,
shadows laugh,
as I scream.

© 2010 Allison


Author's Note

Allison
This is how I felt two nights ago and I'm really... delicate about it.

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

excellent poem, good details are a plus. sometimes i start feeling exactly this way and i hate it. Your very good about getting people to understand the emotion your trying to convey :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


This poem is very dramatic and well written. There are so many things I can say about your poem. First, it is very descriptive. I think you can even run with what you have, but It definitely isn’t necessary. When I think of demons I think of supernatural, but in this case I don’t think that’s the kind of “demon” you mean, which puts a creative and interesting twist. It’s interesting to me also that you didn’t capitalize “god” which can lead a reader to think many things. I think this is a great poem and very private. Great job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


WHOA!!!!! good one it has a great imagery thought on it.... wat ur trying 2 say is the devils getting into u ant turning u emo....good job...its really good i luve the rhyming in ur poetry

Posted 10 Years Ago



Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

291 Views
3 Reviews
Rating
Added on January 17, 2010
Last Updated on January 17, 2010

Author

Allison
Allison

IL



About
"I was half in love with her by the time we sat down. That's the thing about girls. Every time they do something pretty, even if they're not much to look at, or even if they're sort of stupid, you fal.. more..

Writing
You You

A Poem by Allison


The Sea The Sea

A Poem by Allison