Where did you go?

A Poem by Amb

You were here when it was so dark,

When everything felt just so bizarre,

Always and forever

To listen and to make feel better

Where did you go, whoever you are?

Why did you drift away so far?

You listened to me through my thick and thin,

You listened to all the funny things

Where did you go, whoever you are?

My eternity had you in it,

My dreams had you in it,

Day and night

Dark and light

You were my hope,

You were my sight

Without you all seems so vague

Where did you go, whoever you are?

Every time I lost, you made me win

You made me get rid of my deepest sins

So much of all that I want to say

Where did you go, oh, whoever you are?

© 2014 Amb

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xMiss_Psychosis_Phantom..

Hello Amb. Welcome to WritersCafe, I am The_Quill_of_Night, but you can call me Quill. If you need any help with anything on Writerscafe, whether it be writing, rules, forums, or e.t.c., do not be afraid to message me! Now, to the review of your poem.

Things I enjoyed:

1) Passion: You inserted a great amount of passion into this piece. It could have been because this is something you are dealing with, or maybe something old, but whatever it may be, it really added to this piece. The passion helps readers become more involved in the piece. Beautifully done.

2) Pattern: The way you wrote this was almost in the form of Lyric poetry. It had the repetition of the one verse, and slight rhyme which was used very well. It has a good rhythm like a Lyric poem should, as well. :)

Things you could work on:

1) Stanzas: I personally would have broke the poem into stanzas, but overall, it is not entirely needed within this piece.

Overall, the piece was beautiful. On a separate level, it is like a memory of this person is still in your mind, but the person has been gone for so long to the point you are practically forgetting who they were. The persons being someone they were before by action, or simply, just a person who has disappeared. Beautifully done. :)