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Guitars and Boudoirs

Guitars and Boudoirs

A Chapter by Ana Papaya
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Romeo rocked 
 through a lonely woman's 
        heart and dreams        

with gently tapping fingers 
      like blinking stars 
             sliding along her strings        
and into her milky way 

delivering wishes 
    and filling desires 
       within warm moist sighs 

taking her to the place 
   where softly whispered intentions 
      pave a road to hell 
          and bad boys play with fire while 
                good girls discover       

how it feels 
         to be         
 burned 

      but  alive.         

~~~


© 2020 Ana Papaya


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first a suggestion Ana, I think the impact of the ending might be stronger if you drop the 'but".... not sure it's needed, but what do you think Ana?? anyway, just a suggestion....

now for the poem.... it's true what Kelly wrote, it gets hard to continuously say WOW about the poems you write, and yet WOW is a really good word to say and use.... so WOW Ana, just WOW... okay, that was probably too many.... I like the way you pull us into the warm and fuzzy and then drop us into the fire... cause at first I was thinking damn, Ana has a real love, good for her... and then wham and the smile faded and, and.... but what is amazing is that your poem in just a few line can take you through these emotions.... this is poetry, this is good poetry and all I can say is WOW!!!!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

9 Months Ago

Burned alive is different meaning from burned, but alive

Burned alive is unpleasant .. read more
redzone

9 Months Ago

aaah, his eyes are now open.... let me take my foot out of my mouth... thank you Ana for your thinki.. read more
Ana Papaya

9 Months Ago

No worries, I always appreciate suggestions and discussion. I've edited my poems on many occasions .. read more



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first a suggestion Ana, I think the impact of the ending might be stronger if you drop the 'but".... not sure it's needed, but what do you think Ana?? anyway, just a suggestion....

now for the poem.... it's true what Kelly wrote, it gets hard to continuously say WOW about the poems you write, and yet WOW is a really good word to say and use.... so WOW Ana, just WOW... okay, that was probably too many.... I like the way you pull us into the warm and fuzzy and then drop us into the fire... cause at first I was thinking damn, Ana has a real love, good for her... and then wham and the smile faded and, and.... but what is amazing is that your poem in just a few line can take you through these emotions.... this is poetry, this is good poetry and all I can say is WOW!!!!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

9 Months Ago

Burned alive is different meaning from burned, but alive

Burned alive is unpleasant .. read more
redzone

9 Months Ago

aaah, his eyes are now open.... let me take my foot out of my mouth... thank you Ana for your thinki.. read more
Ana Papaya

9 Months Ago

No worries, I always appreciate suggestions and discussion. I've edited my poems on many occasions .. read more
"softly whispered intentions pave a road to hell"
:)

Run, Juliette. He's a cad, and a villain. Guys that guitar are no damn good.


Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

9 Months Ago

Yes, I cannot disagree with that. At least from my experience. :)

Of course, you ca.. read more
I'm kind of seeing the spirit of one of Hendrix's guitars in this if you get my drift. He played them to within an inch of their lives - they gave the audience such thrills at his hands - they spoke when he played - but then they became their own funeral pyre.
The last line adds that hope that is a constant theme in your work. It's a lifeline.
Excellent title, excellent piece poem. Filled with pain and yet glory - survivors glory.
:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

That's a great comment, thanks!
...gee girl, I personally think you rock, too! I mean really, how many times can I say wow and mow you over?

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

Thank you Kelly. I think you rock it pretty good yourself. I'm glad you like this!:)
Reminds me of a guy named Mishka Shubaly.

He is also a wordsmith.


Posted 4 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

Ah yes, Mishka Shubaly. :)
Thank you again
Geez you're good babe! This is delicious your word choices, soft rolling syllables the unfolding pace...a little dreamy seduction. Dope! x

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

Geez, I love your visits. Seriously.
You're so good for my poetic confidence.
Love ya.. read more
aLittlePain

4 Years Ago

Right on! Love ya right back x

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