black scarves

black scarves

A Chapter by Ana Papaya
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blue veins 
pulse 
beneath black scarves 
that hold small wrists 
tightly bound 
her punishment accepted 
with barely a sound 
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I know people get into this, but I am not fan of SM/BD... how does that song go something like "when it comes to love I like a slow hand and gentle touch"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dbk29JZdl5A
this is the song by the Pointer Sisters

Posted 9 Months Ago


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Ana Papaya

9 Months Ago

This one is open to interpretation of course but to each his own. I've no issue with anything conse.. read more
This might be my fav from you thus far.

Very sensual, vivid and risque, right up my alley!

One small input

"Barely a sound" - maybe "muffled sound" or something along those lines? dunno. Just a thought.

Like I said, I like it anyways. Good stuff.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

Thanks very much Alessander. I will think on that suggestion!
Alessander

4 Years Ago

No problemo. Could go a number of ways. "pillowed sound" etc. Dunno. drink some wine and let it flow.. read more
Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

I'll happily share that space with whatever awesomeness is in there. :) Thank you.
I recalled the attention getting features brought on by punishment. The cycle seemed to drift into infinity. Your poem seems a much softer form.

Regards,
Al

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

Thanks very much, Al. Appreciate the comment.
is punishment ever actually accepted? no matter how quiet there is always a murmur. another gem Papaya!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

That is very true MC. Thank you for reading this one.
This could go a few different ways - Mr grey way or the way that struck me first which was of a child so used to nobody coming to help her when she cried/screamed that she stopped using her voice or stopped trying to scream. That sends shudders up my spine.
The Mr Grey thing isn't worth mentioning now...
i like the style of this - the less is more and the way it tails off like an unheard whisper...
Very potent and affecting write Ana.
:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Tony Jordan

4 Years Ago

great writes beget great comments...nah, Im kidding
Your welcome is what I meant to say.
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Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

Thanks, your message cut off, for some reason that 'read more' does not work from time to time. But.. read more
When punishment is accepted with barely a sound, then it's a pretty safe bet that you're with the right person. Trust unlocks many bounds. Your last line works so well, barely a sound conveys so much more than silence or screams.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

Very kind comments, thanks. I thought you weren't reviewing as much? :)
Lorry

4 Years Ago

That was just a busy phase. Back on the ball now, whittling down my reading list. Should be back up .. read more
You create a picture for the reader. Bounded and quiet. Very good use of words. Make the situation come alive to the reader dear Poet.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much. :)
Coyote Poetry

4 Years Ago

I like when you dance with erotic and you are welcome.
Oh, you just had to go there. At least they are black and not Gray.:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

There is a certain Grey I would enjoy I think.
Lyn Anderson

4 Years Ago

I see. Well, carry on then...;)
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This has a kind of enigmatic darkness to it. I like it. The title is quite alluring for many reasons as it could lend itself to many things. As a painter it's an inspiring piece. Starz x

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

Hi Starz, I've just started painting too. I'm really enjoying it. Not quite to your caliber howeve.. read more
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4 Years Ago

Have you...that's brilliant I'm so pleased you shared that Ana! Caliber is just a matter of opinion .. read more
Ana Papaya

4 Years Ago

Yeah, maybe I will post one one day!

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