Out of place

Out of place

A Chapter by Ana Papaya
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If I could sprinkle sunshine
upon your face
would it feel so out of place
or would you brush it away
accustomed to the rain
I could paint rainbows
in your eyes
add glitter and shine
yet still you would decline
you've grown comfortable
bathing in dirt and grime
I can't understand why
when your dreams
get tangled up with mine
two hearts one mind
you push me away
time after time
when all I ever wanted
was to give you the sun
paint rainbows in your eyes
take away the dirt and grime
and polish your shine
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© 2020 Ana Papaya


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I love everything about this except the word "upon". I'd rather read it as two words- up on, or simply on and drop the up altogether. I know that's rude of me to suggest, bit it struck me like a blue note in a otherwise flawless sonata. Please forgive my impertinence.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thanks Brian, always welcome suggestions.
Not crazy about two words, changes the imagery for .. read more



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Awwww!
So hopeful but still so sad :)
Speaks on people's ideals and ideas in a very personal way.
Personally, I don't know who WOULDN'T want rainbows in their eyes.
It just doesn't make SENSE...

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

10 Months Ago

It just doesn't make SENSE...
:)
There are those who don't do happy. Whatever you do for some, it's not going to be enough. They prefer the dirt and the grime. A slice of life Ana.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Yes. True indeed Chris. Thank you!
some people despise being happy, they just can't stand prosperity or love, aren't comfortable with either. And they would rather live in a dwelling of misery, even when the sun and the chance for happiness are right outside their door, begging to be let in.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Yes, it's like that. Thanks Jacob!
Ah, this was like a breath of fresh air to a prisoner. What wonderful and uplifting thoughts you bring us, sprinkling sunshine and painting rainbows. I loved the entirety; simply, a very enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Hi Fabian, thank you!
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Sometimes all that glitter and sunshine is best preserved for one who truly deserves it. It's a lovely soul that wishes to bring light and colours to another. If such notions are rejected and such persons prefer to dwell in darkness, dirt and grime.....then the loss is completely theirs to own. I would bottle up that sunshine, keep the lids on your paints and glitters and spend them on someone more deserving. Those that neglect light and colour for darkness usually dwell there eternally. It's a very generous poem, dear Ana. Bottle those sunbeams! Much enjoyed! :))

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thanks for that guidance Jamila. :)
Some people are not meant for finer things. They love the dirt they wallow in. Its home to them. To put a male perspective on it, I'm a die-hard loner and though many a great girl have tried to pull me to domestic bliss, I prefer my hole. Relationships to me are not about perfect light and joy. I'm scared of perfection. I love my dark, my tears and my loneliness. I'm nothing without them. I'm only speaking for myself here though. Others could be different. A very touching poem, Ms. Ana.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Yes, I know what you mean. Reminds me of the song "she's only happy when it rains". I guess someti.. read more
AJNJ

1 Year Ago

I understand totally :)
Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

of course you do, you wise old hermit
(joking) :)
Although unintended (I think), I can't help but relate this akin to the easing of lockdown, when we will all know what it is like to be the pit pony, blinking in pain at the light it once loved.
But that poor pit pony has given up on beauty, eroded by others unknown, leaving an indelible impression on it heart.
The consequences of many lead us into closing our hearts to the innocent, who only ever want to deny that feeling of closure to themselves, trying to keep the beauty of hope alive.
Or maybe it's about someone who just refuses to share their gummy bears, but beautifully captured as always Ana.
Ps... I was going to write Haribo hearts, but don't know if you get them there 😀

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

I like and appreciate your interpretations. :)

jeez... dont it just happen that way sometimes... an oft occurring reality well captured and crafted into something of considerably greater permanence… relationships eh' who'd have them... Nice ink ma'am :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thank you kindly Neville :)
Neville

1 Year Ago


always welcome..
A nicely written representation of the difficult relationship business.
As you have so well expressed, sometimes things just don't work out
Very best 2U A Papaya.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thank you much Dave
Also, I adore that she's painting "in" his eyes, not on them. Just sayin...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ana Papaya

1 Year Ago

Thanks! :)

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