Flames

i'm on fire, you don't like it, but you don't fully put me out. i shall silence my burns for you.

Through the flames, you can’t see me.

For the fire is too strong, and my wounds too deep.

I lay on the ground, 

And let the orange, slightly blue, warming figures creep.

As it wraps around my skin, I feel less pain and more relief.

I’m burning right in front of you, yet you think i’m at peace.

You ignore my pain, you look away while I get consumed by places.

Does it make you feel better to think i'm okay?

See the blood pouring out my eyes,

While the heat deteriorates my brain.

When it cuts, it cuts deep, aiming straight for my veins.

My pain makes you sad,

So you asked me to go away.

So the only way I can stay around,

Is by carving a smile on my face.

Author's Note

what do you think? favorite line?

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

The titular flames represent the speaker's pain, apparently caused by the loss of a lover. The lover seemingly is dismissive of that pain, which makes it all the more unbearable. The last three lines do not come across clearly to me. I can't tell who is speaking, the speaker or the lover.

[Anaya]

I accidentally put say instead of sad. But it me speaking the whole time (the speaker). The last three lines are explaining how I mask the pain to make my love comfortable around me, to get my love's love I cannot express my true pain...

[Carina Baumert]

Okay, for me the strongest or favorite line would be: 'As it wraps around my skin, I feel less pain and more relief'. Because the line carries the most emotion within it.