Alice

wip.. i guess...

Of all people. Alice.

Back in high school I never would have believed she’d turn out like this. I watched her making my coffee. I'd known it was her right away but I waited until she came back to the counter before asking if she remembered me.

She stared at me then shook her head. “I’m having an existential crisis," she laughed. “I remember nothing”.

I smiled back dismissively. “That’s okay.”

I snatched up my coffee and left. A bitter gremlin gnawed at the pit of my stomach for days.

 “Of all people. Alice.” I muttered.

Why had she mutilated her arm and shaved her head? The questions silently ate away at me until I wondered if I loved her.

Author's Note

be gone writers block!

Reviews

[Delmar Cooper]

This works. The remaining sixteen characters are to...

[Stan Lee]

Glad it works... What?

[Delmar Cooper]

"What? " 25 characters are required to leave a comment. So much for succinct.

[Stan Lee]

Oh. I get it.

[Melanie Dickens Sharp]

Great writing! So much to ponder in such succinctness. The ending caught me off guard (in a good way). I too, now, am wondering what happened to Alice.

[Stan Lee]

Thank you so much for your kind review Melanie. I'm so glad that you enjoyed the story and that it left you wondering. It always pleases me when the reader finds something to ponder. :)

[zella]

so simple and memorable! I loved how real and raw it became...

[Stan Lee]

Thank you Zella :) I appreciate your review.

[Mike]

Hi Andronicus - AWESOME! Loved reading this little gem. Superb tension and twist. Very relatable but told with rare precision... I'm new to this site and just randomly reading bits, but have to read some of your other works now.

[Stan Lee]

Mike, Sometimes I feel that time does not permit me to express the full extent of my of gratitude at such a generous review. Your words are very encouraging to me. I'm very glad that you enjoyed the story and extra grateful for your enthusiastic review. Thank you! Thank you!

[Jacob Clifford]

Doodley took the words straight from my mouth. Life has many twists and turns, and you never know where we'll go or how we'll change. This story is very well presented. If you wrote this to stave off writer's block, then I say you succeeded. Very well done.

[Stan Lee]

Thank you very much for your kind review Clifford. :) I'm glad you found it well done. Indeed writers block is eating me for breakfast. :P

[Doodley]

Hmmm. An interesting story!

I had a similar experience to this. Many years out of school, I came across a classmate from my year. What once had been a jovial, cheerful guy had been through the hellish pathway of drug addiction and was barely recognisable from the person I once knew.

Your story just illustrates how our lives can change drastically as we travel its pathway, altered for better or worse by our experiences and the choices we make.

I see you have struggled with writer's block? Then join the club! Haha. I just beat it off with a wooden spoon myself.

A very relevant short story, Andronicus. Fiction with a non fiction grounding. Nicely written as always, with a very ponderous conclusion. Well Done.

[Stan Lee]

Dooooooodley!! How do you write such awesome reviews? How do you write such awesome everything? Thank you! Thank you! Now let's see about replying. Hmmmm. That's a thinking noise so I guess I'm glad the story made you think. Then I'm glad you found it interesting, and relateable. There's a writers block club? Tell me where to sign up! ;) Thank you! thank you! for all the kindness Doodley. Very glad you liked it. :)

[Doodley]

Born awesome! Not my fault! :p. My pleasure to review your works. Always enjoyable.