My Mother of Mine

This is a poem I wrote for my mother for her birthday. I need feedback ASAP because I want to make sure it is perfect.

Warming glow of sun

Laugh in hearty song

Smile of candle light

Cradling and rocking

Mother of mine

Soft yarn spindled wool

A beautiful masterpiece of woven thread

Created and crafting

Swaying melodies in return

Mother of mine

Vanilla chocolate strawberry sweet

Slice of birthday cake and frosting

With contrasting fire-y strength

Exploring worlds on booted foot

Mother of mine

Growing and ascending 

Years in counting

Raising young and lively

As role of prized working leader

Mother of mine

Welcoming arms of home

Roaring blaze of passion

Never will be another

One and only in space of heart

Mother of mine

My mother of mine

Author's Note

Is there anything too repetitive, too clunky, doesn't sound right? Please tell me

Reviews

[Sagarika]

It’s nice to read I’m sure your mom is going to love it.... I just feel the last line my mother of mine seems unnecessary and odd. Otherwise it’s good it shows the love for your mom.
Birthday wishes to her from my side