Lust Limitations

She cannot be any more for me.

Cannot touch, cannot see or know

what it would mean to lie beside her.

Below or above or inside her.

I cannot kiss her skin enough

to satisfy my tongue,

at root amidst tonsil and gum.

There is nothing between my legs

to satisfy the ache I’ve beshouldered

nor to give her what she wants.

And yet to be the bearer of such lofty arms,

I have not the strength

to hold her to me, tight enough

nor strength to let her go.

Therefore pianist or organist,

no digits can so far reach

to abrade this itch within me.

What worldly force there is to bray

no hips move expeditiously

enough to shake this wanting free

not rhetoric, charm nor Rationale

bestow words to dissuade my need.

I have no arms to pull her closely,

nor shape to fit her skin.

 

Yet I cannot be any less for her.

Author's Note

Your thoughts, criticism and responses are greatly appreciated :) I try to draw on more than one subject area in this piece. Not being able to give someone what they want, but wanting to all the same and immeasurable desire that feels as if there is nothing to relieve it.

Reviews

[Ruth]

To want to know someone as intensely is never conveyed better than this! I have no criticism! lol Flawless and many elements infused, surreal as well as amazing work! xx

[Becky C Strukamp]

what it would mean to lie beside her.
Below or above or inside her.


These lines were my favorite...so sensually arousing


Yet I cannot be any less for her.

Good choice for last line

A nice sexual arousing poem. Nicely penned.

[Alskar]

Overtly sexual, yet subtly portrayed. The longing and ache of the speaker to physically be with this woman is clear, and his inferiority invokes sympathy from the reader. Again I find this hard to criticise, as it does what it says on the tin without overly flowery language.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

One heckuva a thing to read first thing in the AM. I really understood this, reflecting back on the Quixotic romantic misadventures of my youth. The inner tug-o-war is heart wrenching, and very real.

Absolutely outstanding work!

[Julie Watkins]

Such longing in this piece. It would have been so easy to slip into cliche but you've side-stepped it deftly with your word choices. If you're looking for critique I'd suggest dropping the capitals at the beginning of some of your lines to allow the thought to continue/aid the enjambment. The flow of the piece is already very good, this would nail it. Very well written.

[L]

What it would mean to lie beside her.
Below or above or inside her.

>>love those lines

[Marie Anzalone]

the longing and ache of unconsummated desire... how much more difficult it must be to approach someone when there could be backlash against an orientation

[Angel's Lady]

I cannot kiss her skin enough
To satisfy my tongue --- Brilliant!

I love the title, too....This is a wonderful write and I know exactly what you feel. And the more I get, the more I want.

Great write!