Gloom galore

Where do I go when I don’t belong home

When infestations have overpowered me

 

Where do I go when I want some peace

Where I can find some comfort and serenity

 

Where do I go when I can't move on

And I can't ignore the prominent evidence

 

And who should I be if I’m undermined

And not destined for prosperity and excellence

 

What else should I do when my attempts constantly fail

And I end up winded after all tries

 

And what do I do when I'm given false hope

And rely on abominable lies

 

Where can I go when my mere existence

Is something that should cause me self hate

 

Who should I turn to when all hope’s been evicted

And my enemy destines my fate

 

Tell me where I am to go when I’m forced to fight

In a war that’s as ancient as time

 

And what I should do when I live in a prison

Although I’ve committed no prosecutable crime

 

What should I do when there’s no suitable catharsis

And I live in a state of constant agony

 

And tell me what would you do If you were dehumanized

All because your pigmentation was ebony

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a very powerful message crafted in an original way. Your questioning is well done & not at all like the "doom & gloom" pieces one sometimes sees here at the cafe. This isn't just dumping bad feelings, but an astute questioning of the unfairness of society. As I was reading, I noticed that there seems to be a distinct sense of "giving up" -- as if the narrator's fate is in the hands of others. I want to encourage a person feeling this way to try to own one's life & not be so willing to allow others to define it for you. You draw an intense & realistic word portrait of how it can feel to be demoralized by the way others define you (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Aphitenza]

It is indeed written in a questioning way. The distinct sense of giving up is also hidden in between the rhetoric questioning in the poem, which genuinely portrays the idea that the speaker lives and struggles in a society they have no power over. Thank you very much for your review! It is highly appreciated

[Rama]

Aphitenza,
The gloom is galore, I do agree. You have poured your heart's agony out poignantly!! The pain can be clearly visualized!! Yet, I wish to state that it's never ever all over! As you know the dark night is followed by a bright day! Hope is what will keep you happy and gay! So look over and see the positive side.


Rama