~Suddenly Shaded~

“We are all of us stars, and we deserve to twinkle.”

-Marilyn Monroe

Stars burn bright, they illuminate the night, but sometimes they lose their light… they… lose... their light… 

Carrying stars whose light is fading

fractured fragments filled with pain

chasing rays that are waning

suddenly shaded…. 

Never should’ve given in

wending walls within where you wouldn’t win

closing doors before your war weakened me

leaving thieving shores where I shouldn’t be

but then, not sure… there’s no guarantee

still willfully wandering aimlessly

regardless of the guards I can plainly see. 

Been trying to save us both, not knowing your heart was made of stone

bones broken from weighted guilt you’ve thrown

left crying, disowned and all alone

roaming the globe- still no home to call my own

reeling from feelings that I’ve never known.  

I wish we’d never met, memories I can’t forget

scars fill the heart with so much regret

‘cause I thought we’d always be together forever

loving each other, yet you can’t ever forget her

I wish you weren’t like all the rest

but then, yeah... I should’ve guessed 

Oh, how I need this closure… just tell me it’s over……. 

These sinking stars, quickly becoming jaded

pained by the games you play

only so much they can take…

These weakened stars, constantly frustrated

caught in the cage you created

decaying in the wake of one mistake…

Author's Note

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Reviews

[W R Stowe]

Love will sometimes hurt and mostly because of a lack of communication.People have a tendency to talk at each other instead of to each other check out "Take a chance" that I wrote it helps describe how to love again also "Love And Marriage" gives some details on the subject as well this is well written but a bit on the dark side but that's your style if I'm not mistaken

[Einstein Noodle]

stars do fade and even die sometimes ..i never gave it much thought being always caught up in the dazzle and brilliance of cloudless nights ... sigh! and only one mistake ....just doesn't seem fair eh!?
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[AprilRN1210]

((Hugs)) E......it sure doesn't seem fair. Thank you for always being a friend and your never-ending support.

[Einstein Noodle]

ohhhh April! I sure do miss you ... i do hope you find more time and inclination to hang out more often ... i am praying for you .. as you RN your shifts ... and heal ... and post some more soon!!! :) big hug .. hope you feel it!

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Loved the way you portrayed battered love.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

April, I have to turn off the rap lyrics in order to appreciate the beauty of your words. I can't hear myself read your beautiful poem with lyrics blasting out, even if they are not on loud. The words that are spoken in rap are clear and rattle off in such a way that they diminish the integrity of your work. I loved the message you were conveying in diminishing starlight. Not all stars shine forever. Sometimes, they go dark and they have no light left to illuminate anyone else. A sad state of affairs, but it is true....Great write! (again...:)

[SCRIBBLER]

This is full of so much emotion and sorrow. It is one of the best sad poetry i've read. Keep writing for us.
Greatly enjoyed.

~Scribble On

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you for this lovely review, I am glad you enjoyed. It is nice to meet you:)

[Trace]

Breakup poetry is good for the soul.

Sad.... but good.


Take care of you.

Trace

[AprilRN1210]

Hey Trace.. good for the soul?.. I so wish it wasn't the case.. but alas, I guess it is the way I purge my pain.. thank you for your continued friendship and support.. it means a lot.. I miss you and hope all is well.. ((big hugs)) and likewise my sweet friend..

[Parimal Pratyush]

Past does form a basis of our judgement for others. And if it was not very pleasant, we feel eerie about everyone all the time. Loved the poem, the song, your words. Brilliant, as always.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much my friend.. this was written from a place of shock.. of pain.. of confusion.. your support means so much... it is always such a pleasure to see you and hear your thoughts.. ((big hugs))

[~]

A poem skillfully written ful of alliterations and metaphors that mimic the mood of the speaker so well. Don't know why but the rhythm almost reads like one of those R&B divas songs.
You put a lot of thought into this and it payed off. :)

[AprilRN1210]

I apologize for my delayed response.. Thank you for this lovely review, I appreciate it.. I am glad you enjoyed..

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I will never understand why some move on too quickly from one relationship to another without taking the time to sort through the post trauma that the end of a relationship usually brings. And, when they jump into a new relationship with lingering feelings from the former relationship, they deny it and pull the other into a deeply complicated web of phantom memories and regrets. Usually by the time he realizes he still loves a past lover the new one has invested their all. I know what this feels like and it's devastating - "sinking stars can become jaded". Great write.

[AprilRN1210]

I have typed a response and deleted three times already.. I can honestly say, I don't know what to say.. ha!.. I am a little shocked that after reading one of my scribbles, you actually came back for another one.. I guess a generic "thank you" could be added here... it really does mean a lot to know that not only does someone "get" what you are trying to say, but they also understand and appreciate the work that went into creating it....

"deeply complicated web of phantom memories and regrets"... that just gave me chills.. I couldn't have described it any better... I don't understand why they do this either... but it is devastating and hurts, you are absolutely correct.. thank you again, I really do appreciate your time and thoughts..

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The pleasure is all mine April, truly. Your thanks, and great poetry, are enough to keep me coming back for more. :)

[AprilRN1210]

you have brightened my day more than you know, thank you again..

[....................]

That makes me happy then... now you have brightened mine!!!

[Woody]

THERE SHE IS!!!

sumptuous write as always. but why the heartache? if he ditched me for someone else, I'd change the lock and forget about him. I' know he'd come back begging to be given another chance. his loss not mine.
that's my take on the matter anyway.
wonderful wording April. what's new, right?

[AprilRN1210]

Woody!!! oh my goodness!! It is so great to see you.. just seeing your icon brings a smile to my face and then to read your lovely review just warmed my heart.. Thank you so much.. I always love your "take on the matter" any way I can get it.. now come here and gimme ((big hugs)).. I have missed you! I promise to come by your page and catch up on some reading this weekend.. I sure could use a big dose of your humor.. thank you again.. :)

[Woody]

haha my pleasure entirely April. lovely to see your smiling face, too. and the mischief dancing in those eyes, though you're trying to hide them behind those cheaters.
thank you for the hugs. I feel all warm and fuzzy. hugs back, Dear.

[AprilRN1210]

haha!.. never try to hide it.. just smile sweetly feigning innocence while the mischievous twinkle dances from thoughts through the eyes.. glasses,, errr. yea--still getting used to them.. yuck!.. thanks for the hugs back.. warm and fuzzy is nice, isn't it.. I sure needed it.. :)