A Word

spontaneous random poem :P enjoy

A  word

It weighs upon me

Driving me deeper into the ground

A suffocating reality

One that I can not escape

One that does not wish to allow me to pretend anymore

One that knows that my wishes are not my own

A word 

Reviews

[Summer D.]

Welcome to Writers Cafe :D Nice to see you joined Archangel.
I write more poems then I do stories; so I'm more comfortable with reviewing this.

I liked it; didn't love it but I liked it.
You could be somewhat less lazy with the format; maybe add some italics or something to emphasize importance?

There are only two or so quirks I have about the poem.
"One that does not wish to allow me to pretend anymore
One that knows that my wishes are not my own."

You use the word wish/wishes. Find another way to say that. It ruins the flow and the first line is //somewhat//choppy.

Exp Revision:

" One that has no desire for my lies; that my thoughts/wishes are not my own."

The ending was great. It was like an envelope poem! Remember that? :)
Another thing- I wish you could've given me more of a hint as to what the word was. I guess it's just one of those poems. I can't really preach innocence..My poems aren't entirely specific...

YT,

Summer D.

*85*

[Coyote Poetry]

Some words make us think and ponder till we can release them to paper. I like the thoughts and the ending in this poem. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Andy]

lol, yes words can be very powerful & hurtful ;p

[Evelyn Storm]

That poem really spoke to me. I think for me that word can be an irrefutable truth or a crushing grief usually about someone close to me. Great poem! Thanks for sharing!