Staked

When you have nothing left to lose. When you have nothing left.

Pathetic is the word that is best to use

to constitute the reasons for which I abuse.

I dont' know what happened. I don't want it this way.

Why is this better? I want you to stay.

I fall at your feet. I'm brittle. I'm crying.

I can't take this anymore. I feel like I"m dying.

How could this happen? How could I abuse

the one thing in life I can't stand to lose.

We may be so different, but is that so wrong?

There's always been harmony between our two songs.

I'm dying. I can't take this. I'm lost and confused.

How in the hell could I have ever abused?

For my sin, there's no penance. You deserve to be fine.

It's blasphemy to harm you, to damn the divine.

These words, they're toxic; acidic with truth.

Your burns and your scars come from my lack of couth.

My reason, my judgment, will fail you no more.

I don't want to hurt you. I've walked out the door.

I've robbed you of laughter and have grown to hate mine.

We used to be happy. Is this parting a sign?

The ash catches fire as it burns from the smolder.

Yet, as the fire ignites, it only grows colder.

My body rejects the fact that you're gone.

I can never be rid of you, but is that so wrong?

I've tried to change. I have and I failed.

I would try again, but that ship has sailed.

I want no one else. No one, but you.

I'm staked in the heart, but YOU'RE bleeding through.

You shouldn't suffer because of my pain,

So I leave you, my love, as I crawl away slain.

Please try to forgive me. It's all in the past.

Please tell me that this day won't be our last.

I see us; our future, in glorious time.

I see us together. This vision's sublime.

From rapture to rapture, from beginning to end,

We can no longer work unless one of us bends.

Too stuborn, too psycho, too wrapped in one's self.

These accursed traits were robbing your health.

I hate them, I hate ME, but I can't seem to change.

We weren't like this before. It all seems so strange.

I write you these words in the wake of my going

to leave you these thoughts as my love continues growing.

Now to your knowledge, I reap what I'm sowing.

I miss your soft kiss. I wish I weren't going.

I leave you my dreams that embody my bane.

I fight for my mind and my right to keep sane.

My mind remains clouded with what seems to be rage.

My existance is hollow. I need out of this cage.

You shouldn't suffer because of my pain,

So I leave you my love as I die here in vain.

Author's Note

I still love her. ...and I always will.

Reviews

[Ashley.M.E]

this is really good I like it alot. So much feeling. I read another of your poems, didn't leave a comment, but your really really good at it.

I noticed a few errors though... very little things though, a lot better then I can do I know I make a lot of mistakes, but I liek to fix them so... i hope you don't mind?
line 3. dont' (don't)
line 6. i"m (i'm)
line 37. stuborn (stubborn)
line 48. existance (existence)

[Fran Marie]

We may be so different, but is that so wrong?

There's always been harmony between our two songs.

I'm dying. I can't take this. I'm lost and confused.

How in the hell could I have ever abused?

For my sin, there's no penance. You deserve to be fine.

It's blasphemy to harm you, to damn the divine.


I just had to read this again, my last review of this was deleted somehow ~ at any rate
I so love the above stanza , so much emotional pain within this piece~THanks for sharing
once again your superb pen my friend~Fran

[Melissa Kesead]

Very vivid and such a sad parting. Thank you for sharing!

[Lexi Nicole]

This is amazingly written, the rhyme and flow are flawless, the imagery is great, all the emotions are laid out for the reader. Powerful, yet lovely. Strong, but beautiful. Great work!

-Howl

[Annebelle Ashire]

they do not have to know you,
to hear the silent tears, streaming down your face....
and thrashing at your feet.


- your sweet Annebelle

[~Unashamed Love~]

Beautifully written, I really enjoyed reading it!
Your rhymes are perfect, and the imagery completely fits the poem,
Great job !!
You are very talented!
=)

[~angelalala~]

"The ash catches fire as it burns from the smolder.

Yet, as the fire ignites, it only grows colder." what amazing imagery. i love this poem, so full of raw emotions, so full of fire. the flow is perfect. it flows from line to line like silk. this poem is intense. darkly beautifully written & a pleasure to read.

[Mitji]

Very expressionate and well put! I loved it!

[poet2angels (lynda)]

This is filled with emotion and the wonderful rhyme helps the piece flow effortlessly
Great poem..

Happy New Year!

Lynda

[Adela Muresan]

Very touching.
I like the way your emotions flow into verse, it creates a great euphony.

I don't think I've ever read a better poetic reflection of love, because all of us know that... mostly it's suffering.

A.M.

[Michelle Tarnowski]

This is a wonderful write. It flows well and you have some beautiful lines that just caught me:
"There's always been harmony between our two songs."
"I fall at your feet. I'm brittle. I'm crying."
"I'm staked in the heart, but YOU'RE bleeding through."
The whole poem has an aggressiveness that is edged with desire and tempered with remorse.