Vermont

Vermont

A Poem by Ashley_Pietro

oh
how glorious you look
in the valley of her embrace
    the way she drapes
    over the inhabiting
    bristles of your neckline
your amber reflection
    glistening
like a field of diamonds--
her woodland perfume
absorbs beneath the creases
of your shoulders
and flows through your divinity
    like wildfire
I resent her for breathing
in your oxygen
sunrise after sunrise
and being the last sensation
to graze your delicate bark
sunset after sunset
    each cycle
a deluge
of tender agony
    And I hate
    how beautiful she looks
    with you inside her

© 2014 Ashley_Pietro


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Like with the other I just read...this flows and the usage of the words:

sunrise after sunrise
---
sunset after sunset

breaks the pace of this work...gives us as a reader a focal point...
again...the added measure of your last 3 lines gives...
I see you style is consistent...
in the way you arrange your design with the words...

Posted 10 Years Ago


I agree with Ron. The last part is marvellous!
It's WAY! better than the first part. Your language is wonderful throughout the entire poem, but the imagery from "I resent her breathing" stands out in originality. The imagery is poignant, sharp and evocative!

Wonderful!

K.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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I resent her for breathing
in your oxygen
sunrise after sunrise
and being the last sensation
to graze your delicate bark
sunset after sunset
each cycle
a deluge
of tender agony
And I hate
how beautiful she looks
with you inside her


I am speechless.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Ashley_Pietro

Boston, MA



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