Fifty

Fifty

A Poem by Asilem
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a poem about Fifty Shades

"
You're dangerous.
You scare me
with your rapid mood swings
My dear Fifty Shades of Fucked Up

Like a drug
I need you to survive
I need you
With all of your kinky fuckery

You are my soul mate
You make me happy
You make me feel complete
You're my Fifty Shades of Grey

© 2013 Asilem


Author's Note

Asilem
I just wrote it. *shrug* I hope you like it.

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nice flow. good word choice. Although the references to 50 shades of gray is a bit taxing. This piece is yours however, by throwing the 50 shades reference you are pulling away from your piece to add steam to the 50 shades.
Other than that it put together very well.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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LOL cool


Posted 11 Years Ago


We must take the good of bad of another person. I like the way you balanced the thoughts in the poem. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Somewhat exaggerated, but it's poetry - you can't get away from that. If it was me, I'd keep away from the references to Fifty Shades and instead write about something more interesting or worthwhile, but as it is, the poem has merit based on the decent imagery you use. The whole thing conjures up a sort of brief insanity in my opinion - after all, the narrator is addressing a book, and refers to it as her soul mate. Your work would be much less restricted if you wrote about something less specific.

Posted 11 Years Ago


nice flow. good word choice. Although the references to 50 shades of gray is a bit taxing. This piece is yours however, by throwing the 50 shades reference you are pulling away from your piece to add steam to the 50 shades.
Other than that it put together very well.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 11, 2013
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Tags: fifty shades or grey, love, romance, drugs

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Asilem
Asilem

Washinton DC, DC



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