Till S / For S

The english translation: 

Our voices echo in the hallway

Everyone else have already gone home

But we sit here with an unspoken fear

That if we take one step too far

We won't ever find our way back home

You sit next to me

Slowly nodding

But I know that you're not really here

I keep on talking cause silence is scary

You smile and distantly nod again

Your thoughts are with that woman

She with the heart of ice

It's her voice which echoes in the hallway

The crowded hallway of your mind

I keep on talking

You keep on nodding

Both of us scared of the world outside

We both know that we prefer the darkness

In the badly lit tunnels of our minds. 

The original version in Swedish:

Ljudet av våra röster ekar i korridoren

Alla andra har redan gått hem

Men vi sitter här med en outtalad rädsla

Att om vi tar ett för stort steg hittar vi aldrig hem igen

Du sitter mittemot mig och nickar

Men jag vet att du egentligen inte är här

Jag fortsätter att prata för tystnad är läskigt

Du nickar igen och ler lite gran

Dina tankar är hos henne

Kvinnan med ett hjärta av is

Hennes ord ekar i dina tankars korridorer

Det är dom orden som sakta tar ditt liv

Jag fortsätter att prata

Du fortsätter att nicka

Vi är båda rädda för världen utanför

- Vi föredrar värmen här i vår lilla korridor

Author's Note

I originally wrote this poem in Swedish, so the English version is a translation. I personally think the original flows more naturally and the words are more accurate...I had to change a lot of the sentences in order to make it work in English so it's not exactly the same.

Reviews

[Fleur-de-lys]

I can only imagine the intricate details of the original Swedish, but if it is anything like the English translation, I am extremely impressed. This piece made my heart feel hollow - you convey the need to hold on to what is known, what is safe, when one feels they are not yet ready to face the outside world in all of its terrifying newness perfectly.

[cfix]

I really liked the layout.
It's really nice you know how to write both.
Like the emotions in this write as well.