I'll Never Forgive You...

Emotional spewing

I...
Love...
You...

Only now I've realized.

Damn it...

How could I have let you in?
I did everything I could to keep you out.
From the first time my eyes fell on yours...
I knew you'd be nothing but trouble.

 And to love you?
I could never let that happen.
I did my best to avoid your looks...
...your sweet, sweet smile that had all the others withering in pleasure.
Stupid girl.
How could I let you fool me?
You'd only break my heart.

You gave me your attention because I never spared mine.
You didn't understand me...
Looked at me like I was some science project.
You couldn't figure me out.

You're not a bad guy...
You're not the worst...
But you're not what I had in mind.
You're too dangerous.

You made me love you.
I'll never forgive you for that.

Why me?
Why me?
What did I do?
You had the world but wanted the girl who did what she could to repulse you.
 

But in the end you win; you always do.
Happy?
Now go on your way and leave me here alone...
That's all this was anyway.
Just a game.
Your favorite.
Win the unobtainable girl's heart...then break it.
With one...foul...swoop.

I love you, damn it.


Please walk away before you find you love me too.

Author's Note

I don't usually use profanity, but for some reason I feel that this piece just isn't fully expressed without it.
I'll probably edit it out later...
Please share honest thoughts.

Reviews

[Dr. Robert]

parts of this i liked, parts i didnt. I didnt really feel it was much of a monologue as it was a soliloquy. Still overall it wasnt bad. The use of quick snappy questions and the actual form of the text itself helped convey a lot of emotion. Excellent job!

[Kira]

But in the end you win; you always do.
Happy?
Now go on your way and leave me here alone...
That's all this was anyway.
Just a game.
Your favorite.
Win the unobtainable girl's heart...then break it.
With one...foul...swoop.

I love you, damn it.

Please walk away before you find you love me too.

Ohhhhh, I LOOOOOOOVE IIIIIIIIIIIT!

Do you know how to favorite stuff? I reeeeeaaaaalllllly want to but I don't know how!!

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations for winning the Heartbreak-Hotel contest!

[Xfaerie corpseX]

Why me?
Why me?
What did I do?
You had the world but wanted the girl who did what she could to repulse you.


But in the end you win; you always do.
Happy?
Now go on your way and leave me here alone...
That's all this was anyway.
Just a game.
Your favorite.
Win the unobtainable girl's heart...then break it.
With one...foul...swoop.

I love you, damn it.




ah...the futile fight for something we know is bad for us... in the end we lose... and our emotions fall for us even tho our better judgement is screaming out in attempt to save us. emotions dont have brains, never think or consider... we can only hope that the person of our affection is trustworthy enough. Sadly i wish emotions had a voice of reason...
very powerful peice.

[Kett]

....so what is love. ......and how do us girls stay away from that particular bad boy that knows us in all our frailties, sensitivities.. we always let them in and they know it.

....i connect to this all to well. .......you have the guts in the style of your stanzas to put it out there. nice.

[Yes]

Spifftastically, brutally, beautifully honest about how love can be. I know the feeling all too well.... but that's just how it can be sometimes.
On the words themselves, mostly the style, I say that some of your lines look too long... meaning they don't appear to 'fit in' with the rest of the lines, which are short.
That's just my opinion though :)