Mirror Mirror

Mirror mirror

On the page

Filled with hate

And filled with rage

Who’s the angry one you see

The person looking back at me

 

Mirror mirror

Can’t erase

Pain that’s showing

On my face

Who’s the broken one you see

The person looking back at me

 

Mirror mirror

Sitting there

Don’t pretend

You really care

Who’s the lonely one you see

The person looking back at me

 

Mirror mirror

That I smash

Take a piece

And make a slash

Who’s the dying one you see

The person looking back at me

 

Mirror mirror

Fixed with glue

Standing tall
And good as new

Who’s the desperate one you see

The person looking back at me

 

Mirror mirror

Crystal clear

Why am I

Still standing here

Who’s potential that you see

The person looking back at me

Reviews

[HadesRising]

Nicely written piece of poetry.

I am not cruel, only truthful ‚
The eye of a little god, four-cornered.
Most of the time I meditate on the opposite wall.
It is pink, with speckles. I have looked at it so long
I think it is part of my heart. But it flickers.
Faces and darkness separate us over and over.

Now I am a lake. A woman bends over me,
Searching my reaches for what she really is.
Then she turns to those liars, the candles or the moon.
I see her back, and reflect it faithfully.
She rewards me with tears and an agitation of hands.
I am important to her. She comes and goes.
Each morning it is her face that replaces the darkness.
In me she has drowned a young girl, and in me an old woman
Rises toward her day after day, like a terrible fish.

[emipoemi]

This is an absolutely brilliant take on the "mirror mirror" quote (though the quote in itself was misconstrued). The rhythm and rhyme flow fantastically, and the message is powerful! If I may be so bold, I would suggest the addition of a "the" at the beginning of Stanza 2 Line 3, for it flows better that way; and "who's potential that you see" - "potential" as an adjective doesn't exactly mean what you think it means in this line, though I applaud your attempt at applying the poetic license. It is a good word, and it complements "person" very well, but it doesn't work in the previous line given it's missing something to make better sense and that line can't sustain another syllable. If you can figure it out, good on you, but those two things I've mentioned are my only critiques for this gem of a piece. Well done!

[kgam]

I have a quote that you must remember if you are getting this Kaelee. I have my doubts, I think it is a set up. If it's not I love you Kaelee and anyone who separates another person or isolates that person from their family is a very dangerous. However on a positive note for your quote

"IT IS NONE OF YOUR BUSINIESS WHAT YOU THINK OF ME" Be yourself and remember
Gammy loves you always.

[PrestonWL]

Wow.... good job!!
xoxo

Yours Truly, and yours sincerely, PrestonWL

[kgam]

Counting down 14, 28, 31, 30, don't loose faith, 31, 30, 31, 31, 30, almost there, 31, and finally 8!!!

[kgam]

I miss you kaelee. This is the day, This is the day, well you know the rest. How we would sing. Here is a message for you. I look out my window looking for you. I can not see you but feel you in my heart. I get cherished things that remind me of you, made by your hands with love and care, and place them in each window pane. I hope you see them and know that you are loved. I hope you see them and know you are loved. . . by me. I sing the song that I created for you when you were born, and hope it reaches across the universe to you. Yes I do! Love always and forever, Gammy

[Stephen]

Really good poem. I like your style and the uniqueness that you bring to the page. I like the message aswell.

[willweb]

Wow, this was very cool, a nice take off from the "who's the fairest of them all" I really enjoyed this today.