Shifting shadows

Esteem and honor never followed me,

And why should it?

Does the sun ever acknowledge the radiance of an embittered moon? 
Or does the sky ever question,

The clouds and their forever accumulating state? 

But I am shifting shadows,

Blown by the wind and I am lost like every other sunken ship.
Your sacred paths, I crawl along,

With blood at my hands and sorrow on my lips,
I linger in shadows for seasons on end

Gripping to every promise she made

That soon proved to be forgotten. 

But I'll blame time and distance 
For these holy grounds are not where shadows are to fall,
And these sinking sands are not where I belong.

 

This is not where I belong-
There is nowhere we belong.

Reviews

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~ we belong to your universe of exquisite verse... because ever since you showed up, we're witnessing the talent of a natural versifier... who writes images that are both powerful and poignant... and has a poetic voice that resounds... ~ philosophically speaking, if i believe in something or someone, i don't give up... if i give up, it's because of my own philosophical evolution (not the other person's behaviour or actions)... i take ownership... but i don't mean that others should as well... each to his own...

~ p.s. do you think the second line would read better if "it" was replaced with "they" ?

[Azriel]

thanks a lot serah, you really do choose the best words to motivate and make me want to improve my craft... i too agree with that view... although it's hard to put into practice all the time.

and i will consider replacing... the only reason i used "it" instead of ''they" was because at the time i was viewing "esteem and honor" as two parts of the same thing... now i realize that hardly makes sense... lol... so thanks again.

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~ everything worthwhile is hard to put into practice... :P
~ you're very welcome... :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

"But I am shifting shadows/Blown by the wind and I am lost like every other sunken ship"--what a great image...strong and filled with palpable texture. I quite liked this; the feeling of facing our mortal strife and toil in the fact that we are all lonely in some way or another, whether in a room full of people or a room full of books. Well done.

[Azriel]

thank you, i really do appreciate your words, and your interpretation of it is spot on, to how i felt while writing it.

[Frieda P]

I really like this Azriel, intriguing subject matter with much food for thought here...

Does the sun ever acknowledge the radiance of an embittered moon?

Love that line, it's money. Nice one.

[Azriel]

thank you frieda, it really does mean a lot coming from someone as talented as you.

[Frieda P]

My pleasure, you've got talent, and you've only just begun! Lot of deep thinking went into this one...

[Azriel]

thanks again frieda... hopefully one day i'll write as good as you :)