Perfect

I wrote this for a guy who I fell in love with and watched him fall in love with another girl. I write out my feelings and after seeing what she looked like, this is what I wrote

His eyes so perfect

His face so handsome

From the scruffies of his beard

To his soft hair

Even the scars that cover his body

Everything about him is perfect

Her eyes

Her body

Her looks and smile

All breathtaking

Everything about her is perfect

The other girl

Just there

Worthless and causing fights

Wish she was her

Wishing she could be with him

But she's perfect

And he's even more amazing

The perfect couple

And through the hurt and tears

He still loves her

And through my pain and cries

I still love him...

Author's Note

This being my first poem to post, I am hoping for feedback on the poem itself. Some people think I have an odd writing style but thats okay. Feedback would be amazing. :)

Reviews

[Dak]

infatuation. the greatest feeling, with the most powerful strike to the heart. great piece with raw emotion. it was a good read.

-Dak

[Chelle]

Thank you. :)

[SmittyJas]

Great for romantic scribbles and love stories continue on this path and I will review more Good Start Interesting problem we all face sometime in our lives.