Forbidden Love II

Forbidden Love II

 

Awe, you lay there quivering with tiny goose bumps of pleasure, as if you’re cold

Grabbing my bottom lips with a tender bite, exhaling completely but keeping hold

 

To look in your windows while sharing such a stimulating gift

Is forbidden, for there is no turning back, once our bodies lift

 

But I can’t help myself, I grow weaker and constantly beckon, please

Your fingers so controlling, my will is totally lost with this hypnotic tease

 

My mind is racing a mile a minute, and spinning like a drunken fool

As your fingers brush oh so gentle, my stomach ripples, and awe you’re so smooth

 

My skin has caught fire as our bodies radiate with a golden red glow

I try to break away, but delusions over power me…there’s something you should know

 

I fight a compelling feeling as the potion flows from my fibers to my feet

My logic has changed, and my thoughts of forbidden love, has now gone discreet

 

Reviews

[TamiViolet]

Awe, you did it! You actually did it! Ralphy, this is totally hot. I love it, everything about it! Sorry but I'm just so pleased right now, just a bit excited that you decided to write part II, know what I'm saying? lol.

I hope you realize that you would make an excellent erotic writer because you write about emotion accompanying love/lust. Your work is meaningful yet never loses heat. I truly don't even know where to begin here, for there is no beginning or ending in this delicious work of art. Truly yummy like the forbidden apple in the graphic.

Rhyme is perfect, really like the 'gift' and 'lift' lines :-) Also, the line about the potion flowing from fibers to feet :-) :-)

Thank you for posting this delight, my dear friend. You know it MUST be included among my favs. Awe... (smiles)

[C.R. Moore "Lasla"]

Passion,Passion,Passion yes indeed nice flow and rhyme here with sensuality in a great erotic write !
Posed in class and skilled at love you have captured a moment that we all long to feel again and again!
Excellent

Lasla

[Emmie]

I just finished reading "Romeo and Juliet" at school, and this reminds me of it. Your work is always pleasing, but this goes the extra mile. I'm off to read the aftermath of a forbidden love :)

[Winter McPherson]

This is delightful! All the passion with none of the crudeness. That's truly an art. This write seemed more forbidden then then last......like a progression from thought to action. Well done!

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Oh my! Wow! i'm taken back. This is a fantastic write. So passionate, and sensual, and pleasing to read. I could even see this read spoken word, and it giving everyone goosebumps. and prob make others go home with their lovers and explore....lol....nice ralphy!

[Carrie Montgomery]

it's almost as if you just dropped us in the middle of some long and suffering love story...we don't know who these lovers are, how they got together, why the love is "forbidden". All we know is the narrator has deep emotional ties with a person who has set them on fire. This is quite a read. I am impressed!

[SallyS29]

Your work seems well thought out and very expressive. You seem to know what feelings are involved in the subject of your poems, but your express surprise at the outcomes �.. Why?

[Jessica Fox]

so sweet so sappy, what has bitten you in the butt mister? Good poem

[closed account]

very romantic (romance is in the air)
staying intune with that gentle side
is very attractive, there are many faces
to poetry, and of course being a romantic
a poem like this? is just my cup of tea! or coffee rather!!lol
great work.

[Voice]

Very beautiful and I agree with Kim very passionate also. I love romantic poetry...as you know :) once again you have outdone yourself...just amazing!!!

Voice