Hope this heart stops beating....

New version of..'I just forgot how'..

You tell me to forget you

to finally move on

cause you think this love thing isn't something pure

its bad and its only wrong. 

I should see your point because

for me,you are always right 

so I decide to bury your memory

my love shall die this night. 

I already have tried burning it,

burying it, throwing it away

tried Ripping it, thrashing it

yet,it keeps growing day by day 

But now I will summon all that I have

Hopefully this love dies

No worrying,no missing from now on

no cloudless rain from my eyes.

I am ready to leave my feelings,

my thoughts of you,behind

I want to be a heartless man

leaving you helplessly confined. 

Throwing away all the feelings,

the pains I will erase

I will wrap my body in my own self

after putting on my brave face. 

I have tried this on most starry nights

but coming morning your presence still lurks 

I've been doing all that I know

but it seems nothing really works.

So as I am going to bed

With all my heart,am praying for you

It would be the last time,

coming morning I will be through.

I know my love is eternal

but even eternity shall die one day

I hope my heart stops beating tonight

and shall take this love away......

Reviews

[The Refined Poet]

beautiful blend of sentiment and sadness. the last stanza is so fitting.

[Manpreet]

Awesome piece with lot of emotion and pain. Well penned!!!

[Loner]

I am so impressed by this mature write every word
u have written is penned in your blood it seems
a great write from u keep it up....

[Becca Bishop]

Very nice :) I love the rhyming that you do; it makes it so beautiful. I love this aspect of love, the painful part that people seem to just kind've gloss over whenever possible. This is great!!!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

clever rhyming scheme with good writing, well done

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

This is so beautiful! It's tragic and heartbreaking, and really has a feeling of loss and a little bit of longing. The rhythm and flow throughout this whole piece was excellent. I think that the last stanza was a really beautiful way to wrap up the piece.. Amazing write (: overall, this was a really beautiful poem.. I think maybe it could even be changed a little bit to be turned into a song.

[Westminster Abbey]

I love this! You can really feel the pain that you are expressing. It made me actually pity you. Great write1 100/100

[James William Dyer]

I like the emotion, it left me wanting specificity

[quinfinn]

the heart wants what the heart wants, and cant be told to stop loving no matter how hard you try. the desire for a death to the pain of losing love is a normal one, both literally and metaphorically...i love the way you express your feelings herein, beautiful.....

[Deron Alexis]

amazing simply wonderfully fantastically cool "but even eternity shall die one day"
that line just did it for me you know that one line in an amazing poem that just sends you over the top. I try to do that in all of mine but it is difficult and you my friend just did it well