Sonnet 5: Why doth I love the silence of the night sky?

Why doth I love the silence of the night sky

The heavenly distance of the dawn

the abode into which my essence dreams to fly

The depth of eve mysteriously withdrawn.

The burning brightness of the full moon,

The hues that damp thunderhead bears

For what my heart hath seekth the starry boon

Night hath her dreams and the forsaken heart its tears.

Reticence and longing seekth astral rest 

The heaven where the frost lies all that froze

On inaccessible cloud's footless crest

Lies all the peaceful glow,the warm repose.

The seeking spirit gasps, the faint star hears

And deep as thy deep eyes the aurora appears.

Author's Note

Feedback much appreciated..'. :)
Most probabaly it will be my last poem of 2012..will be busy in my exams till 4th of Jan..that ofcourse if the world doesnt end :p :D

Reviews

[Justin Littlefield]

It's a beautiful piece! The only discrepancy is the meter. Sonnets traditionally have a distinguished set of syllables, other than that the rhyme is perfect and the tone is enchanting

[Manpreet]

I enjoyed reading it
The burning brightness of the full moon,
The hues that damp thunderhead bears
For what my heart hath seekth the starry boon
Night hath her dreams and the forsaken heart its tears.

Lined were magical all in all a great piece!

[amarlaksh]

Loved it! keep writing and i agree with James though its also my own sin :p

[James William Dyer]

Loved the poem, but didn't like archaic words like doth and hath. They just aren't part of the vernacular anymore SSA and they completely depricate a work of poetry without contributing at all

[James William Dyer]

Touchscreen added the ssa

[James William Dyer]

Imagery was the strong point here in my opinion

[Marie]

I like Barkaran's use of archaic language; I realized he's trying to creat an Elizabethen mood. But he hasn't quite yet learned how to use them.

[James William Dyer]

You doth love me is less effective, in my opinion, than 'you peel back my insecurities so that I can see you love me. Just an example, but adding a -th and a thou or a will st doesn't contribute. I love shake spear, king Lear is my favorite play...but not because elizabethian was the vernacular of the day. Each to his own

[Marie]

You "doth" love me is not correct."You "do" love me is."Hath seeketh" is gratingly incorrect. "Hath sought" is correct. I could do this--choose not to. Each his own...

[James William Dyer]

I could care less about the linguistic accuricies...it just doesn't work, done right, done wrong....not for me, jus at doesn't work for me

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

I love the really detailed imagery that allows me to picture this all in my head.. This is a beautiful poem, you can really feel the peacefulness of it all, I like it.

[Alexa Tasch]

I love this! It is so beautiful and a ture piece of poetry. It is so peacful and the imagery is great. I really loved it!

[Snow Curls = ]]

its nice:) very detailed and planned out:)

[Euro]

This is rather beautiful for a sonnet. Your words are deep and very beautiful and makes this as a whole wonderful.
Good luck on your exams!
Great sonnet!
-Penelope H.

[patricia]

epic...Balkaran Singh Sidhu!
Some outstanding lines in this that go beyond mere words. If I ever try to imagine how a living thing becomes truly alive, i read lines like these and remember the spirit flowing through your channel and touching our lives for the better.
What can i say?
Wow! XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX

[Cole Hayley]

Wow. Such an incredible peice my friend -- im speachless.