June Reminisce 2

So Summer you are gone again

Your true essence,a memory now

Its how I remember myself

far from the selfishness of living.

Summer, your past again

Only to be remembered as a season

Its how I represent myself

to the mystical shadows of my dreams.

The felicity of rebirth

it is inside the wombs of clouds

The Sun, she can't hurl now

the golden arrows on soil and life.

The clamored breath of nature

The June is a sweet swamp of desire 

I am to trace these days again

And make a bouquet for Summer.

 

Its beautiful how, I loved the silver dust

regrown in the buds of May

Summer is a reflection now only

Of my own life, and love's  pretty color!

Reviews

[Dayran]

Flows like a cool breeze on a summer's day.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This was both creative and thought provoking. The imagery is sharp and sublime at the same time, as you weave sorrow and sweetness together to create the perfect cocktail of nectarous delight. I love the last stanza...it truly speaks of the beauty that can be found in something we thought was lost. Well done...completely enjoyed!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A highl thoughful and regarding piece, well done.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thank u Thomas :)

[gombeggar]

much more thoughtful take...excepting that summer is not over in the northern hemisphere at least

[Balkaran Sidhu]

well not over here either sir....not going anywhere for perhaps a month or so...it was referring to some events in my life..that once took place in these very days :) thanks for the review

[Westminster Abbey]

Yet another excellent poem! My only comment is that you seemed to have used the wrong form of "you're" in the second stanza. Other than that, amazing poetry!

~Abbey
:)

[Balkaran Sidhu]

yeah thats right....well pointed out..thanks for the review abbey :)

[Felicity's Eve]

Amazing! Honestly, I like summer at first, but then can hardly wait for autumn (my favorite season) to roll around. I can't stand the heat and I'm at such a risk of heat stroke... >.<

Very well-penned :)

100/100

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanks nora...don't worry..u urself are a creative storm :p

[Dr. Wood ?]

I can only agree with Junaid....Quite wonderful Balkaran

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thank you Dr. always a pleasure to have u here :)

[junaid altaf]

this is simply exquisite!
very elegant and delightful to read.................

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thank you junaid....:) :)