Head on My Shoulders

This song is a little more upbeat and is kind of flow-y but not super happy and jubilant. It's also unfinished so there will probably be more sometime soon.

Head on my shoulders going down in the river,

What more can I say.

The People all wave as they pass by,

on board the sky train, and they were singing

Chorus: It's a free world that we open our eyes to every morn

   Everyday, every night we close.

   End with a bang, finish with the finale

   As I sing La la la la la, la la la

On the sky train you go anywhere,

But you don't know till you get there.

The sky is a road as the lights they pass by,

I close my eyes.

Chorus

Roller coaster out of control,

Hit my heart.

A shank, a stab every step of the way,

what more can I say.

Reviews

[Amit Parmessur]

You write well.
Far from the world of rejections, we are ready to help maximum people get published.
I do suggest you submit a few poems to Golden Apple for our future issues.
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[Eternal.Dreamer]

I would love to hear this with music ;)

[Immortal]

Shank You =]

[Wake Up!]

Wow, that was really awesome. Typically i try to give some sort of criticism to help fellow writers, but i have none. wicked job, man(:

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

wow, this is another excellent piece, you have a beautiful talent