LOAY ASHRAF ...

Loay Ashraf is my twin brother , but he helped me a lot through the life.... i wrote this one for him :D

LOAY ASHRAF

 

Long friendship from long years

Open minded that makes me chears

And makes my world just fine

Yellow rays that make my world shine

 

All what i said is the true

Straight from my heart and mind

Help me bro. in this life to find

Rests between wars in life

Away from this strife

Friend like you is a hard one to find

 

 

thanks bro.

his name is Loay Ashraf =)

Author's Note

all comments are welcomed :D
any advices or something ?

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Your writing is very gentle and loving as it should be for a twin brother.. you are one in spirit.

Your English is good but, it isn't accurate by any means, but, it has sincerity and that's very important. The idea of creating acrostic poems with names is clever even though your grammar and spelling isn't quite there... yet.

But, please, keep writing because you have real talent.

[Katie]

:) This poem made me smile! I really liked the flow of the words. I hope you give this to your brother, he'll love it!!