DRUG AND CURE

a piece to describe little of her beauty..

Your eyes have such an admiring look
Which will make even the prettiest girl to quarrel
Not with mortals but with their Creator
Full of arguments for a lost battle.....

Mused in your thoughts and dreams
I realized the existence of my worthy heart
The only grudge placed deep within
'Why we're still some distance apart?'...

Always brought that 'you love me?' trial
In the state of surety or doubt
Counteract the ultimate result smartly
Whenever a 'NO' is sensed in the hasty bout....

What am I supposed to do
When you're my only drug and cure
Leaving you is like betraying my soul
How can I forget such a distracting lure....

Yes I count your absence
When you're not with me
Grovel and crawl for that day and hour
Our soul mingling together and set free..

Written By- BASU GUPTA

Reviews

[Cookie]

This was wonderfully written.Great job

[Basu Gupta]

thanxxxxxx

[InsanityWriter]

Nice. :) Good poem.

[Basu Gupta]

thankew.....

[Miranda Richard]

I like your rhyming pattern, you use a lot of lovely words. Great write :)

[Basu Gupta]

thank you Rayne...

[Veronica Chandler]

Very nice write Basu... Agony clearly left on the page for anyone to read. Keep up the writing it is enjoyable and full of emotion.

[Basu Gupta]

thanks a lot ma'am.......

[Frankie]

That was very beautiful and so heartfelt. I could definitely feel the deep emotion you put into this. I like the ... at the end of each stanza. Very beautifully written.

[Basu Gupta]

thankew Frankie..

[blueholmes]

:) sing of love and hurt coz it does exist :) Great write!! :) love the rhymes, though there's something missing sometimes.but don't worry, you're not alone :)whoever cares bout poetic licence?? again, great write!! :)

[Basu Gupta]

heheh...this seems nice...thanks a lot

[jerrypat]

Love and lovely relationships have a very bad history. When one of the lovers leaves, the other one, the one left bleeding from the soul, is bereft to the quick.

[Basu Gupta]

ya sure....i guess the "sometimes we're destined too.."
btw thanks for the read..

[Phoenix]

set free

[CookieDough]

I love it! Very good:)

[Basu Gupta]

thanq....

[Ohhhwillow]

"To quarrel" does not make much sense grammatically, you may want to look over this, as with your rhetorical question, it may need some revision. I feel a sense of deep desire in this, to be admired as you admire. T'd say the first step to being ready to be loved, is to learn to love yourself first - without accepting yourself, it is very hard for others to. Secondly, beauty is just that. We live in a world draped with it. As with anything, it can be deceptive. Do not be indulged by superficiality. I admire that you speak your heart and I think this has some great potential - perhaps this could be extended, or filled out with some close description to draw the reader in further to your reality? Keep writing!

[Basu Gupta]

okay...i'll try to revise it again..and sum up with good manipulations.....
thanks