Mortality

When the loved ones bid good bye with no concern,

When the mirror broke causing an ugly delusion,

When the sweet moments went out of routine,

When the flying kite snapped in between,

When my fave ice-cream got exhausted

When the cozy night culminated,

 

My mind urged for eternity

But then I was dragged into reality,

And looked out for the beauty of mortality..

 

There's unending sky spreading above

Yet eye looks out for the splitting horizon,

A rendezvous for the earth and heaven's love

 

Standing tall are the defying mountains,

Image fill the eyes yet the target lies at it's tip,

Though the journey's end is totally certain

 

Miles to trace in the race of running,

Only when the competition ends-

The winner comes into being

 

Death gives pain,

Good byes make us insane,

Yet mortality is not totally disdain!

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Jamie]

'Standing tall are the defying mountains,

Image fill the eyes yet the target lies at it's tip,

Though the journey's end is totally certain' Such a powerful piece of work and the imagery is brilliant!

[Deepika]

Thank you Jamie :)

[Jamie]

You're welcome :)

[Emily]

'A rendezvous for the earth and heaven's love'
Love this line!
Keep it up!

[Deepika]

thanks a lot emily :)

[Sami Khalil]

"My mind urged for eternity
But then I was dragged into reality,
And looked out for the beauty of mortality.."

A poem that grabs you and holds your attention till the end...Excellent...:).......

[Deepika]

Thank you so much Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).....

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Very different way of looking into a situation. Impressive & mesmerizing work Ma'am

[Deepika]

Thanks a lot Nitesh :)

[Saravanan Evu]

Well said... Keep writing!

[Deepika]

Thank you Saravanan :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

You know what... this is your best work till date and you know how much I have enjoyed your previous works.... but you somehow have increased your bar with this one..... this is so very well written....hats off Deepika

[Deepika]

Thanks a lot Anurag :) That means a lot to me!

[Mayank]

I love the pattern here, the imagery that flows through the pain and the life, in one way it carries beautiful message.

[Deepika]

Thank you so much Mayank :)

[Ana B.]

I love the poem. The message is great and the meaning is powerful. Love your style, is always intense.

[Deepika]

Thank you Ana:)

[Saddam]

I love its construction.
You write always meaningful.
This is another fab write.
Good to choose it for day begin.

[Deepika]

Thank you so much Ssadd :)

[Saddam]

Welcome friend.............

[AaronFreitas]

"Death gives pain,
Good byes make us insane,
Yet mortality is not totally disdain!"

I love that entire stanza! Great work

[Deepika]

Thank you so much Aaron :)