Thoughts

All my thoughts are filled with you
Each and every day
Thoughts of hold and kissing my love
Someone whos beauty no one comes close to

And when there is someone as amazing as you, love is all one can do
And in my heart I would not have it any other way
For you are as pure and sweet as a dove
And I hope i can spend the rest of time with you

Reviews

[Krazy On The Outside]

I like it a lot!
On the third line I think it would sound better if it said holding and kissing you instead of just hold. And whose needs and 'e' in the forth line.
Your fifth line is a bit long, but it's okay. And your one 'I' in your last line isn't capatlized and all the other ones are.
It's a nice piece though. It feels like we are in your head, feeling and seeing what you are.

[MitsueTG]

[Pepsimax]

Beautifully written, excellent vocabulary. I loved this story 10/10, well done, doorbakken, bien fait ,gut gemacht, a few congrats in different languages.