HARD RIDE

Haiku, ocean, beach wind

Gray angry ocean

white caps slap the seaweed beach

one brave surfer falls

Red flags flutter mad

as wind blows off tourists' hats

one lands on the dunes

Dusk calms the cruel sea

beachcombers hunt for shells, crabs

sandpipers, gulls peck

Author's Note

at the beach now

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Your three Haiku pieces certainly paint a most visual beach scene. The first two are most lively as the wind whios up the waves and the final one after a blowy day settles into a more calming picture as dusk arrives. The first is my favourite because I love those white caps slapping the seaweed beach. Very nicely composed Betty.

Chris

[barleygirl]

This is some of the best haiku I've seen at the cafe. You capture the main idea of speaking thru imagery & my favorite aspect is how you show dynamic scenes. Many people do static imagery in haiku, but I like this better. Middle poem, last line, how about using "skids" instead of "lands"? Always look for ways to pump up the intensity a smidgen. Great work! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[R.E. Ray]

Betty, three good haiku poems that flow into one. I lived along the coast in the southeastern US for 15 years, and your poem transported me there. I always found peace at the ocean, even during the worst weather. Nature makes it clear who's truly in charge, and I found peace in knowing I couldn't control anything in that environment. One of my favorites from you.

[Lea Sheryn]

This brings back my old homeplace in vivid detail. I enjoyed growing up in a beach town. Thank you for the memory.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

3rd line second piece...did you mean "lands"--that is how i read it.
these are really perfect...it's like servings of breakfast, lunch and dinner.
each works on its own, but also fits into the symmetry of the entire story told here.
j.