ONCE AGAIN

MOOD

ONCE AGAIN

 

My Evergreen trees

brown all winter

as my droopy face

rests in an abyss

far from nowhere

one candle, a shred of paper

words, an empty bottle

my psyche, my entire being

depressed from the darkness

inside and out

 

Perchance the outside

would diminish my mental pressure

should it lighten up forthcoming

I linger, in hope

that I may desert my bleak abyss

rummage for words to write in my journal

Once again

B.H.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

MOOD

Reviews

[mattavelli]

Hello, Betty!
Woah, that is definitely a mood. Haha
It seems like you were ready to go out and paint the trees green.
Tonight will be chilly, but tomorrow looks like 70℉ and mostly sunny. That's pretty close to perfect. :)

[Betty Hermelee]

It definitely was a mood! Thanks for reading Mat! Best, B

[Coyote Poetry]

I have 50 or more journals. When reading and the song don't work. I seek old words and thoughts. Hello dear Betty and I hope you are doing well and staying safe. Thank you for sharing your amazing words and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Betty Hermelee]

He dear John; I know the feeling!!! Thanks so much for reviewing this poem; I always appreciate your thoughts...Best, B

[Poetic Beauty]

Winter always makes me depressed and with spring it is like a renewal for the senses and for the soul

[Betty Hermelee]

That's exactly the same for me....I hate dark spaces, I need the sunlight for my brain to function....Thanks always for reading, best, B

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. I like the warmth and the sunshine

[Paul Bell]

Strangely enough, I don't usually suffer the winter darkness, but for some strange reason this winter seemed to have lasted forever. I can now see how people crave the sun to end their depression.
Hopefully life and happiness is on the up.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for that lovely review, B

[Sherri Moshman Paganos]

Well chosen images of sadness -- brown Evergreens, empty bottle. Nice flow to the poem, I enjoyed it.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you Sherri , appreciate your review!

[John the Baptist]

This is either writers block or depression. Maybe both. The mention of the weather makes me think of Seasonal Affective Disorder Syndrome (SADS). By all means, get as much sun as you can. Give the bottle a rest, too. The words will come back; they always do.

[Betty Hermelee]

Good advice advice from a professional! Thanks always, B

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I could only hope that the sun warms this face and awaken life from its slumber. The imagery was powerful. It almost felt as if I had ventured into a black hole. The weight of your words bear down on the reader. You've created an immersive experience.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you so much for visiting, and writing such a powerful review,
Best, Betty
Ps, let’s befriend!

[emmajoy]

' one candle, a shred of paper ~ words, an empty bottle ~ my psyche, my entire being ~ depressed from the darkness ~ inside and out.. '

Expressed so finely: what could be called beautiful sadness. Sometimes writing out emotions, then reading what's been released, helps the mood turn head over heels from a moment or few gone, passed... perhaps? Now we're coming out of Winter and able to see space ahead, look up at the sky ~ more often blue than grey .. brightens the spirit... or should, if we let it. I so hope that happens for you.. truly do, dear Betty. Keep safe, keep hoping.. please.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks always Emma fir you in-depth comments, yes light is forthcoming, spring breezes , all things to lift one’s spirit, take care, all the best, Betty

[emmajoy]

Sending smiles!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I have similar mood...the isolation is overbearing...it is like seasons are changing without us.
I think once I did know other people...I am sure they existed...
Maybe soon we will get out again, interact...and find that life we once lived was reality not fantasy.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Totally agree with you J, and thanks always for reading my "stuff"
Best, B

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Betty, you have certainly created a doldrum mood here with this little poem. When your evergreen trees show brown, you know you are in trouble. You need a good dose of sunlight to lift those low spirits. Yesterday I sat in my garden in lovely sunlight for twenty minutes while I enjoyed my breakfast. I have to say that was time well invested. My batteries became recharged. Looking out the window this morning, I am pleased to have done that. We have a grey and windy morning here. All good wishes.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Yes that was pretty maudlin, but a bit of light always helps. All good wishes to you as well Chris.