Oh, I spilled my coffee on you 2

The richness and the stillness of your coffee cup 

the breath of air touching us 

the eye contact i dreaded to reciprocate

the outline of your hair looking as silhouette from the sunset over your head

takes me where we are meant to be 

i can see ourselves having a good time

me resting on your chest

your fingers circling my hair 

you reading The Alchemist 

coffee in our hands

a muslin blanket spread over us

the birds playful and noisy as always 

"Take this! take this"

i hear a voice tapping on my shoulder

it was him

looking at me, smiling confusedly

As I feel my skirt burning 

and lovingly he giggled and said

"Oh, you spilled your coffee on you"

Reviews

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem is a beautiful and evocative description of a moment in time, where the speaker is lost in the richness and stillness of their coffee cup, the breath of air touching them, and the outline of their lover's hair. The imagery of the sunset and the silhouette of hair is particularly striking and paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. The sense of nostalgia and longing is palpable as the speaker imagines a future where they are together, reading The Alchemist and enjoying the simple pleasures of life. The sudden interruption of the man tapping on the speaker's shoulder is an unexpected twist that adds a touch of humor to the poem. Overall, your poem is a beautiful meditation on love, longing, and the simple pleasures of life.

[Bivita]

Thank you Auza for the detailed feedback. Really appreciate it. Cheers!

[Chris Shaw]

I loved how your mind drifted over coffee here. Nice thoughts too before the spill:) Enjoyed the read. Thank you.

Chris

[Bivita]

Glad you liked it!

[Ansal]

The sequel is equally delightful, if not better!

[Bivita]

Thank you!

[Amy R]

Nice ending, twas a fun play with coffee and words. loved both parts!

[Bivita]

Times when used to be a coffee person haha

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't know my friend. Hot coffee on soft skin. Could hurt. I liked the flow of thoughts leading to the interesting ending. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Bivita]

hahaha that could hurt maybe.
thanks for your review though :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my dear friend.