Favorite

Favorite

The favorite is the one you see,
see the one that isn''t me
The one i am is outside
Outside the circle which i stride

I wish i could be in,
In this inner circle of things
Favorite of the once you favour most
Love the most

Lost the most
Your hearth which you lost
To the once you envy
The only thing is to be a part

A part of the secrets, the joys
Even the pains
Because then you know
You count for something

For the joys you can smile along
The secrets that you share among
the pains that are hard to see
But sharing makes me one of them
Just to be

Author's Note

well just an honest opinion please!
I just made it up
and i didnt think bout it,
Clearly,
I was just thinking, feeling i guess
So just critize me if you must!

Reviews

[Tasha]

This was amazing.
I loved it.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Coyote Poetry]

Some poetry is direct and hard. Some poetry is to bring a kind emotion to life. Your poetry brought out questions of emotions and desire of two people.
"A part of the secrets, the joys
Even the pains
Because then you know
You count for something "
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[deeps]

This is an amazing write here.
I really enjoyed this.

[Vinod Kumar U K]

To buried all sadness and smile is an appreciated art and magic, nice poem.....

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

This piece is beautifully written! Your feelings are elegantly displayed and flawless...as feelings should be. Your stanzas are powerful and enjoyable. Wonderful work = ]

-Femme_Gothique (Brittany)

[al25]

I like the way you wrote this. Its like you wrote your thoughts down :)

[LittleMissSunshine :)]

I was a little lost, and a couple of lines seem out of place, but I honestly couldn't tell you which one.
I liked your rhyme pattern in your first stanza, and it would've been nice if you had kept it going throughout the entire piece.
:) Good piece, although it could definetly use some work.

[BrynnaW.]

I loved this poem. It was very strong and unique. A wonderful poem. Good job and keep on writing!

[TheElfPrincess]

This is a sad piece, but I loved it all the same. The stanza's were very strong and it seemed to have its own voice. Well done.