Unknown?

is it too much? or is it okay,... i didnt really watch the words, just the feeling i wanted to come across.. Which feeling do you receive the most?

Unknown?

 

The little twinkle at the midnight sky

The sun has fallen down

Every night faster, that’s no lie

The little twinkle is falling too

 

Hell I don’t know what to do

Standing under midnight sky

Without my twinkle

Without it even falling nearby

 

A little trust, a leap of faith

Still my twinkle fell out of my sight

The darkness swallows the earth

It devours my soul

 

I can’t stop it

It’s like a flame

It’s tune of time to put myself to bed

At dark times like that

 

The bed of night

The bed of sleep

The bed of death

That’s to be said

 

It’s timeless

You won’t feel

you will neither see a thing

Hear or touch isn’t of that time

A ghost to be that will be my newborn life

Scars on my skin are still there

But never felt so quiet and peacefull from within

 

Because there is nothing

Not even the smallest thing

That creates

There will be no more pain

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You went off in many directions in the poem. You started with the stars and went into questions of darkness. I did like some of the strong statements.
"You won’t feel
you will neither see a thing
Hear or touch isn’t of that time
A ghost to be that will be my newborn life
Scars on my skin are still there
But never felt so quiet and peacefull from within"
A interesting ending. Pain will always be with us. A excellent poem.
Coyote