How I Won the War (From Whispering Sweet Nothing)

How I Won the War is a metaphor for love. It truly is scattered battles in a war, isn't it?

 

 

 

How I Won the War

 

 

It was a pivotal battle between the two of us…

the most decisive of all the intimate encounters.

 

Ten years from now I will look back

on this pivotal contest and smile.

 

We attracted each other like

negative and positive.

 

Cinnamon spice laid its siege,

a gentle touch of Vanilla Musk

stabbed my nostrils.

 

Her bullets of affection penetrated my defenses,

almost paralyzing me for life.

 

I was careful in my retaliation,

a cautiously planned counterattack followed.

 

My tactics... flawless,

it broke her down to her knees.

 

 

A white flag followed…

 

 

Maybe it was a well-thought out

trick or something,

but I didn’t care.

 

 

Surrender never before looked so desirable.

 

Touching, screaming, passionate closeness,

and hours of love making followed.

 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Clever writing, good use of passion as war, war as passion..

'Cinnamon spice laid its siege,a gentle touch of Vanilla Musk / stabbed my nostrils.' ... great sound to those words when read aloud.

'Surrender never before looked so desirable.' - for some reason i smiled at that, for it's truth.

My one negative: could you find an alternative for one of the 'pivotals'!

Thanks lots for sharing.

[Lauren Beth]

This is an interesting piece, I really enjoyed reading it. I like the "battle" or "war" between lovers and how "Surrender never before looked so desirable." I can definately relate to this. Good write!

[Hotaru Miyuki]

i like this a lot. it really is a scattered battle but i can see how the metaphor relates to love. great use of showing love.