Illumination

The process of illumination, and its price

I am the sky

through the truth

I can fly

Being watched

forever

by the eternal eye

My purpose is demise,

so that the spirit,

can rise

Only through death

and suffering

can one enjoy the light

The eternal force

grows and dies

reverse

and one can see its prize

 

Author's Note

I wrote this on a mystical night, when the darkness spoke and the light followed.

Hopefully, it makes sense, this appeared on paper many nights ago.

Reviews

[Heromen Selena]

It might just be the two poems that I've read today, but I have a feeling you like to write about mystical topics like gods and light and spirits. :) Honestly you've written beautifully in both poems I've seen. Gracefully, but not in a feminine way if that makes any sense. This poem does make sense! My absolute favorite phrase in this poem is this,

"The eternal force
grows and dies
reverse
and one can see its prize"

Its just wicked cool how it rhymes and the reverse aspect of it intrigued me to think about it. Thinking poems are the best, in my opinion. Unlike "The 3rd Heaven" poem that I read you didn't use nearly as many commas, except in the middle of the poem. I think this way it was better because it drew more attention to those lines than the rest of the poem. They accent the being's purpose which is the center of the poem. Well done :) Can't wait to read more from you.

[Black Star Adept]

Thank you very much for the great comment and advice!!
I am glad that you like both poems so much.
That phrase is my favorite as well, I try to show the circle of life.

Oh, I will indeed change the commas in "The 3rd Heaven".

Thank you very much with your great patience to write such detailed comments! Glad you like the poem so much ;)

[Heromen Selena]

You're welcome! I'll read the poem again without all the commas to see what its like. Sometimes it makes a big difference, but you never know until you try it! ;)

[Alfred Kukitz]

Nice flow although I want to hang around here a little longer before mu light bulb goes off.

[Black Star Adept]

Glad you enjoyed it!! :D

[Madalyn Beck]

This is fantastic! I love this piece! The flow is smooth. The darkness is entrancing. The end is powerful. Fantastic job! I'm a bit sad I didn't get to read this sooner! xo :)

[Black Star Adept]

I am glad you liked it so much! Thank you for the review! :)

[Liliana Wolfsong]

I love this piece. It is short and flows easily while still emitting an underlying darkness that entrances the reader. Awesome job!

[Black Star Adept]

Thank you for the kind words! Glad you enjoyed it ;)

[MagicAl]

Nicely penned.. thoroughly enjoyed the subtle darkness of this piece.. :)

[Black Star Adept]

Thank you very much! Glad you enjoyed the main purpose of the piece ;)

[Sami Khalil]

An amazing write. All good...:).....

[Black Star Adept]

Thank you for your kind word :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....

[InkspotsAndGreyMatter]

Loved the contrasting light/dark theme.. I see learning/perseverance as theme as well

[Black Star Adept]

Thank you, it was hard to keep to such few words

[Mike G Burton]

First impression: For a poem about light, it gets a bit dark. It says that while alive, there's no enjoying the light. I think a larger purpose, instead of demise, is doing our best to pierce the darkness and glimpse the light before giving up and giving in. That may not be the message you intended, but that's what I read. It does looked like a very polished poem... every word drilled down to the one you were intending. Good job.

[Black Star Adept]

Yes indeed the poem is more dark. The intention, is to show that the pure and true (not defiled by human flesh or bi-universal laws) light, only exists outside of this realm. Demise allows Existence, same reversed. Decrease allows Growth, same reversed. So the ultimate for of love and light, can only be caused by the ultimate form of hatred and darkness.
Everyday life, has small and tiny aspects of this, this was meant to be more general.

Thank you for your comment! Glad that you enjoyed this poem :)

[Jon Roggie]

On the ground, sensing the shadow, wondering. Sorry, couldn't help myself. Enjoyed this one.

[Black Star Adept]

Haha, that is funny. Glad you enjoyed it

[John Anderson]

Very nicely done. I enjoyed your poem very much.

[Black Star Adept]

Thank you very much, glad you enjoyed it!

[KWP]

this gives some food for thought indeed .... I can see where you are headed here quite easily ....

I like the shorter lines, nice to read down and take it all in ...

I have seen glimpses of this light you speak of, each day it grows a little bigger if only we ask to see with total love and dedication ...

very nice x

[Black Star Adept]

Yes indeed, if we ask, we receive.
It is great that you have seen this light, I am trying my best to live by this law of love...

Thank you very much for the great comment. Glad you enjoyed it