Excused

In the readers eye. Intaliaswords.com

Impulse sheds from shaded eyes of excuse

Into excused actions by an impulsive hand.

Five fingers, palm, and wrist

Armored by transparent latex that peels

Only when caught dripping poisonous red.

And, with tears on paper,

Confesses dysfunctional restraint,

And, with this,

Fulfills a crime done and uncommitted.

But there is residue between fingers

And fallacy in tears directly hitting the page

As if the mark mistakenly left

Is all too deliberate.

See, silence is awaiting death

And truth is pulling the trigger

And staining the innocence you forced yourself to believe.

But deceit is simply stalling the inevitable,

A debt

That only gains interest over time.

Because one day,

Wide eyes will strike upon the hint of crimson on thumb

And, only then will you finally understand

The truth

In a

Single

Tear.

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Sometimes my mind jumps to a song when reading, so lets see where the frog skipped too https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=64c3XrHutBk



This had something that was sad, love stricken, and honest, nice job.

[lee von cleef]

The tear falls silent settling in a cushion of cotton ,to reach out, a tear should fall on a lovers cheek, a mothers palm, a fathers shoulder, not alone in this indifferent gale...

[Steve]

This is very involved, intense, and intelligently written. I feel like I am viewing a mystery novel here.

[Talia]

Thank you so much! Ya know, I'm ecstatic I found this site. It's hard for me to get feedback from others my age :P

[Steve]

You are welcome. I'm glad you are here.

[Talia]

:) thanks!
Oh btw, I didn't get a chance to comment and review your work, but I read two of your pieces. They're wonderful!

[Steve]

Oh thank you! You are kind. :0)

[Talia]

haha welcome :)

[soliloquy]

You seem to be very skilled in this art of poetry. I am impressed.

[Talia]

Thanks!:)